she waits with her child
beside green walled window, lost
as a stray kitten
~0~0
she waits for the day
green paint of her wall, splashes
dusty ground she walks
"Everyday in every way I’m getting better and better" - Emile Coue
"Everyday in every way I’m getting better and better" - Emile Coue
Nice job, really like these, In the first, the kitten image is universal and the two-word consonance works well in walled window. In the second one, I really like the inversion of typical diction, really comes off strong. Thanks
ReplyDeleteNicely done Grace, you have painted with words and made this picture a true haiga. Thank you for sharing.
ReplyDeleteYour haiku really do tell a story.
ReplyDeleteLiked the kitten reference indeed, of course you prob knew that..haha
ReplyDeletelost as a stray kitten...u turn that one well...
ReplyDeletelost as a stray kitten..such a universal image that all can understand...nice work
ReplyDeleteOh, the first one is poignant. Lost as a stray kitten...excellent.
ReplyDeleteBeautiful haiku....Loved first one more...Loved the comparison 'Stray Kitten'
ReplyDeleteReflects poignance and helplessness.
ReplyDeleteBeautifully crafted.
Wherever she walks, she carries her green wall with her...
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I too, favor lost as a stray kitten ... to me it sealed the image of helplessness and tragedy. I always look forward to your interpretations, Grace! You never disappoint! :)
ReplyDeleteLost eyes. Troubled eyes :-(
ReplyDeleteThat first one is my favorite. You really captured the picture.
ReplyDeletei'm afraid i'm just echoing everyone else, but i love the stray kitten reference... and, as Mama Zen said, you really did capture the picture!
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Nicely portrayed!
ReplyDeleteThat's a perfect take on the image.. Sad, touching and beautiful Grace..
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