Friday, February 24, 2012

Lost boys


young lost boys
unloved, forgotten,
black tattoo


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calls of hate,
needles of venom,
dead peacock

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cult of love,
winds of forgiveness,
redemption


Written for Few Miles Haiku Challenge 2012 for the month of February:   Day 25 - Cult Form: - Haiku Structure: - 3-5-3 .   Thanks for your visits. 
    


22 comments:

  1. Ohhhh now I love this! Amazing the power that can be packed into just 3 lines. 'The Lost boys'- amazing film. This is one of those poems that I can just identify with completely. nicely done

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  2. In each haiku is a "cutting" line! The one that lashes out for me is "dead peacock"! Dramatic!

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    1. Thanks Gemma for noticing this. I would like to stick to the traditional way of writing haiku ~

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  3. Nice work...I like the second the best

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  4. I enjoyed these Haiku, my favourite is the third. Thank you.

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  5. Lovely set of haiku. Each one has at least one 'strong' line. Great!

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  6. A tough subject to write a haiku on! I like "winds of forgiveness."

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  7. The last really has such powerful presence in the words. Also like the movie use too and you didn't use a crummy sequel, big points for that..lol

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  8. nice...love the movie...a fav growing up...and great contrast or transition from the second to third...

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  9. Great one!...I loved the second one...powerful words to describe the emotions
    Thanks for sharing :)

    Humanity

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  10. calls of hate..needles of venom..powerful words Ms.Grace but true..passing by ;)

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  11. So sad...Pity lonely boys... The winds of forgiveness and cult of love must help them...

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  12. Well penned. The first one was my favourite. Your words echoed ignorance and a lack of love and care.

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  13. Yeah, I like the way this progresses from lost and forgotten, to forgiveness and redemption. The Haiku moment for me was 'Black tattoo'. Phew!

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  14. Grace, each haiku is profound. Your last haiku is exquiste.

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  15. Very dramatic set ... Tough subject -- fine interpretation. Thank you! Here is my Day 25.

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  16. A set of haiku I could read many times and not tire of - great story telling

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  17. Wonderful set! I love the progression to redemption.

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  18. Lovely set Grace..! You are so cheerful to all.. Thanks!

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