Thursday, April 12, 2012

Haibun: Empty

She works in the far end cubicle away from laughter and noise.   

Lips pinched tight, arms crossed, she eats her lunch, 
either sandwich or beef patty, on her desk.      

She is cool to friendly gestures.  
No spontaneous embracing.  No hand contact either.   
Specially from men.   


~0~0


warmth of smile fading 
remembering hurtful words,
empty wooden box   










posted for Haiku Heights:   Warmth
and Flash Friday Fiction for G-man:   tell a story in 55 words.




Poetry form:   Haibun - combines the prose and haiku. 
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24 comments:

  1. Brian MillerApril 12, 2012 at 5:58 PM

    emotive end there...there is always a reason you know...empty wooden box is a bit of a conundrum...could be her own coffin as she slowly dies...

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  2. Gloria BakerApril 12, 2012 at 6:29 PM

    is sad Grace, but know some people like that!
    Maybe she is so hurt??? who knows!

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  3. ayalaApril 12, 2012 at 6:45 PM

    Sad write, Grace.

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  4. tigerbriteApril 12, 2012 at 7:29 PM

    I really like this write. strange how most of us have written something sad for this prompt.

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  5. carol l mckennaApril 12, 2012 at 9:14 PM

    powerful 'warmth' ~ especially w/ art work ~thanks, namaste, ^_^

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  6. MargaretApril 12, 2012 at 9:15 PM

    The image doesn't lend itself to happy, thats for sure! I have worked in some places that I preferred to eat at my desk alone too. But I didn't work there for long :)

    Sad piece, sometimes we label people incorrectly - and they really are just hurting on the inside. Tender and sad.

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  7. Pat HattApril 12, 2012 at 9:28 PM

    Sucks to live such a life, although I can agree with the no hand touching too germy..lol

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  8. ElleceeApril 12, 2012 at 10:01 PM

    I can sense her longing. Nicely done.

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  9. PranitaApril 13, 2012 at 12:16 AM

    Sad... Very! A sense of melancholy, this haiku!

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  10. anthonynorthApril 13, 2012 at 3:24 AM

    Melancholy today, but beautifully written.

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  11. Magical Mystical TeacherApril 13, 2012 at 8:10 AM

    "empty wooden box"

    O such a poignant line!


    “Six Takes on ‘Warmth’”

    “Every Farmer Knows”

    “The Warmth of Your Breath”

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  12. Mr. WalkerApril 13, 2012 at 9:06 AM

    Wow, that image of the "empty wooden box" - so powerful. The prose and poetry work so well together.

    Richard

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  13. Marcoantonio Arellano (Nene)April 13, 2012 at 9:17 AM

    It's a good piece that speaks to what some of us capture on a daily basis Which melds into ones selflessness. Nice sensitive piece. Gracias

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  14. Preeti S.April 13, 2012 at 10:10 AM

    Beautifully penned.

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  15. Jeannette,April 13, 2012 at 10:14 AM

    lonely and hurting...as always, your work never fails to amaze me...thanks for sharing..

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  16. PattiKenApril 13, 2012 at 11:08 AM

    This is so sad and powerful, Grace. I like it.

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  17. moondustwriterApril 13, 2012 at 11:14 AM

    Excellent Haibun Grace
    you paint the word empty before you write them

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  18. Nara MaloneApril 13, 2012 at 12:40 PM

    Beautifully crafted. It's what you don't say that impacts us the most.

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  19. G-ManApril 13, 2012 at 12:46 PM

    Grace...
    Happy Blogaversary
    Loved your 55
    Thanks for playing, and have a Kick Ass Week-End

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  20. Tarang SinhaApril 13, 2012 at 12:49 PM

    Nice piece of writing!:)

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  21. Sanjana April 13, 2012 at 4:23 PM

    "empty wooden box"..powerful words..great haiku this:)

    do visit: http://njn-sorceress.blogspot.in/

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  22. Siggi in Downeast MaineApril 13, 2012 at 4:39 PM

    Very nice post...right to the jugular with that last line...built up nicely to the line.
    Thanks for sharing,
    Siggi in Downeast Maine

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  23. CYNOSUREApril 13, 2012 at 4:47 PM

    simply WOW...I don't think I've more proper words for this post... GOD bless you... :)

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  24. LydiaApril 13, 2012 at 7:05 PM

    Very, very powerful.

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