doors open, chimes
people hop in, and out-
scarves, hats, jackets,
turbans, shorts, slippers, shoes-
a sea of hues-
a woman with black veil-
pale girl with tattoos-
an old man, with dirty cart-
lad with headphones-
i trace clouds & blue sky
against gray steel
i am not colorblind,
there are shades, tints
beyond my sunglasses,
borders to scale
in my mind, fenced by words,
beliefs and faith-
i check them everyday-
measuring depth,
levels of acidity-
i seek relief in green
forest, calm acceptance
of mother nature-
i pray for roots of empathy,
seeds of kindness
to rain whatever hardness
is left inside-
slowly, surely, i work
chipping corners-
here comes my station stop-
i fold my edges
under red cardigan-
the crowd surges,
giant waves, blurring our
faces with sands-
Posted for D'verse Poets pub - Border Poetics. Challenge: To write about border theme and include the word "border" either in your title or poem. An extra challenge would be to write about the invisible border theme e.g. mental borders or imaginary boundaries. The form and structure is your choice.
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I really love how you describe the mix in the commuter train... maybe we all need to see that instead of being fenced by glass and steel in private cars.
ReplyDeleteReminds me of when I use to take the light rail downtown when I worked. I actually wrote something once regarding it a long time ago now. I love what you have written here. Yes...all of the above. :)
ReplyDeleteI like the structure and sound of this poem, Grace, which evokes memories of the Tube and various other subway trains I've ridden across Europe in the past. You've captured the hustle and bustle in the list of clothes. I love the way it comes to s stop.
ReplyDeleteLove the theme here ~ the seeking of relief in nature ~ and beautifully written. I'm sure if we could lock properly into the natural world the pressures we put ourselves under and things we strive for would be put in a proper place! Great work Grace
ReplyDeleteI loved the sounds in this especially- turbans, shorts, slippers, shoes-
ReplyDeletea sea of hues- how very very lovely.
The "roots of empathy" would be good passports across invisible borders between people.
ReplyDeleteNew title--A POET'S COMMUTE--incredible energy & imagery here, like Mailer was your muse. HBO used to have a series, SUBWAY STORIES, powerful vignettes and mini-dramas; check it out on Netflix.
ReplyDeleteYou have taken me on the train with you Grace. So much wonderful imagery in this. I love "in my mind, fenced by words,
ReplyDeletebeliefs and faith- "...and " I fold my edges"....lovely writing as always!
Love your description of looking outward to nature in order to look inward and the glimpses outward to a diverse cross-section of humanity. Very beautifully done piece.
ReplyDeleteA border made as you go on your commute. Sure take all in, acidity and all.
ReplyDeleteBeautiful! Brings memories to mind when I took the subway every day many years ago.
ReplyDeleteBeautiful with powerful images.
ReplyDeleteHow far is Alberta from you? This year we went to Quebec City...next time it may be Alberta.
ReplyDeleteHi Ayala! Alberta is on the Eastern Side of Canada, above Montana (USA). We took the plane going there. Yes, I highly recommend a trip to our Banff National park to see the Icefield Parkway and the Canadian Rockies. Thanks!
DeleteA trip in trains. (one of imagination)
ReplyDeleteA skillful picture of those moment outward and inward
ReplyDelete"in my mind, fenced by words,
ReplyDeletebeliefs and faith-"
If we all would focus on ourselves - heal within - what a difference it would make for this world.
So many facets of "border" seen here...whether the physical border of the train does, or the cultural/religious/age/etc. Barriers that are real or percieved. Well written!
ReplyDelete'Turbans shorts slippers shoes' says so much... with this and other phrases you manage to bring up a typical crowded subway scene...I like the internal engagement with edges and openness
ReplyDeleteI really enjoyed this poem, seeking to overcome the 'borders' of our differences. We can all use being anchored by 'roots of empathy' :) I like the red cardigan, too!
ReplyDeleteAh, the world needs this.. Beautifully written, Grace. I especially love these:
ReplyDeletei pray for roots of empathy,
seeds of kindness
We were similarly inspired by the prompt. Nicely done.
ReplyDeleteSo nice -- the people, the need for nature to temper the city crowd, and especially these lines: "i fold my edges / under red cardigan-". Well done!
ReplyDeleteThis seems to me poem about second thoughts, not the ones that come to us first so defined and ordered -- seeing borders everywhere -- but the second which forgives and amends and makes whole again. A train ride into the still part of the heart. Well done.
ReplyDeleteA commuter train - the microcosm of a melting pot. "Chipping away at borders".....would that all be involved in this, every day of every month of every year, wherever we are :) Amen.
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