Sunday, April 1, 2012

Deserted



emptiness stretched far 
shorelines deserted of birds,
bread crumbs turned to dust

~0~0 

palm trees drooping low,
listening to footsteps, but 
nothing whispered back  


Posted for Haiku Heights:  Deserted - This is part of National Poetry Writing Month - Day 2. 


Picture credit:   Reena from Missing Moments
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20 comments:

  1. Sankara Jayanth SApril 1, 2012 at 3:35 PM

    i liked it..
    the second part is very very good and 'insightful' shall i say..
    nice haiku..

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  2. ElleceeApril 1, 2012 at 4:11 PM

    Enjoyed these haiku very much. A favorite line is "nothing whispered back"
    I have been on deserted shore lines too and your lines bring back some memories.

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  3. Gemma WisemanApril 1, 2012 at 5:36 PM

    Descriptive haiku! The last lines in both haiku resonate with a powerful, intimate twist! Delightful!

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  4. Pat HattApril 1, 2012 at 6:43 PM

    Solitude can be grand sometimes, although a whisper back would occasionally be nice.

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  5. ReenaApril 1, 2012 at 7:56 PM

    Love it! Exactly the beach when deserted.

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    1. GraceApril 2, 2012 at 6:24 PM

      Thank you for the lovely picture ~ I am glad you like it ~

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  6. ✿Sie✿April 1, 2012 at 8:38 PM

    the best way to describe a deserted place..emotions in full blast when we are left alone in this deserted place..

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  7. Ramesh SoodApril 1, 2012 at 10:08 PM

    The second one took my breath away and I could hear all the unheard whispering sounds.. wonderfuk Grace.. Well done..

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  8. Jeannette,April 1, 2012 at 11:40 PM

    vivid imagery...love the flow of words..

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  9. Rachana ShakyawarApril 2, 2012 at 1:06 AM

    for me 'bread crumbs turned to dust' was such a classic!! love it the way you say it...simply captures the whole scene! Love it!

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  10. Tarang SinhaApril 2, 2012 at 3:39 AM

    Nice set of haiku and really beautiful image:)

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  11. Marcoantonio Arellano (Nene)April 2, 2012 at 5:38 AM

    Quiet and stillness lend for the moment when one can hear the whispers.
    Sometimes I hear whispers in my stillness, eyelids closed but can see the Universe. 8-)

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  12. Magical Mystical TeacherApril 2, 2012 at 7:28 AM

    What I'd really like to see is dust turning back into bread crumbs! :)

    Deserted Branches

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  13. carol l mckennaApril 2, 2012 at 9:23 AM

    very creatively expressed ~thanks, namaste, ^_^

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  14. Sri ValliApril 2, 2012 at 10:52 AM

    I could feel that deserted feeling you described...Thanks for sharing :)

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  15. KarenApril 2, 2012 at 11:18 AM

    I like them both. "bread crumbs turned to dust"...a fabulous line.

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  16. SurbhiApril 2, 2012 at 12:19 PM

    nothing whispered back ... gud 1 :)

    DESERTED

    http://surbhichugh.blogspot.in/2012/04/deserted.html

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  17. ChevrefeuilleApril 2, 2012 at 2:11 PM

    How wonderful, such a lovely place to be, looks like paradise.

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  18. Siggi in Downeast MaineApril 2, 2012 at 7:56 PM

    Very nice
    Peace,
    Siggi in Downeast Maine

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  19. becca givensApril 2, 2012 at 10:16 PM

    Beautifully expressed, Grace!! Both are strong choices to illustrate the prompt!

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