Thursday, April 12, 2012

Haibun: Empty

She works in the far end cubicle away from laughter and noise.   

Lips pinched tight, arms crossed, she eats her lunch, 
either sandwich or beef patty, on her desk.      

She is cool to friendly gestures.  
No spontaneous embracing.  No hand contact either.   
Specially from men.   


~0~0


warmth of smile fading 
remembering hurtful words,
empty wooden box   










posted for Haiku Heights:   Warmth
and Flash Friday Fiction for G-man:   tell a story in 55 words.




Poetry form:   Haibun - combines the prose and haiku. 

24 comments:

  1. emotive end there...there is always a reason you know...empty wooden box is a bit of a conundrum...could be her own coffin as she slowly dies...

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  2. is sad Grace, but know some people like that!
    Maybe she is so hurt??? who knows!

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  3. I really like this write. strange how most of us have written something sad for this prompt.

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  4. powerful 'warmth' ~ especially w/ art work ~thanks, namaste, ^_^

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  5. The image doesn't lend itself to happy, thats for sure! I have worked in some places that I preferred to eat at my desk alone too. But I didn't work there for long :)

    Sad piece, sometimes we label people incorrectly - and they really are just hurting on the inside. Tender and sad.

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  6. Sucks to live such a life, although I can agree with the no hand touching too germy..lol

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  7. I can sense her longing. Nicely done.

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  8. Sad... Very! A sense of melancholy, this haiku!

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  9. Melancholy today, but beautifully written.

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  10. Wow, that image of the "empty wooden box" - so powerful. The prose and poetry work so well together.

    Richard

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  11. It's a good piece that speaks to what some of us capture on a daily basis Which melds into ones selflessness. Nice sensitive piece. Gracias

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  12. lonely and hurting...as always, your work never fails to amaze me...thanks for sharing..

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  13. This is so sad and powerful, Grace. I like it.

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  14. Excellent Haibun Grace
    you paint the word empty before you write them

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  15. Beautifully crafted. It's what you don't say that impacts us the most.

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  16. Grace...
    Happy Blogaversary
    Loved your 55
    Thanks for playing, and have a Kick Ass Week-End

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  17. "empty wooden box"..powerful words..great haiku this:)

    do visit: http://njn-sorceress.blogspot.in/

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  18. Very nice post...right to the jugular with that last line...built up nicely to the line.
    Thanks for sharing,
    Siggi in Downeast Maine

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  19. simply WOW...I don't think I've more proper words for this post... GOD bless you... :)

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