Grace @ Everyday Amazing
gift me
a winding path
where no footprints nor twine
can restrain my verses, broken
& true
cast me
without shadows
to fear unlike puppets
in theatre, silver-masked, hollowed
& less
steer me
closer to light
where leaves breathe and the wind
runs like a free bird, majestic
& healed
Posted for D'verse Poets Pub - Poetics of Groundhog
and Imaginary Garden with Real Toads - Poetry Form: Cinquain -
I have used nature image with syllable count: 2-4-6-8-2
Beautiful, Grace... I especially like:
ReplyDeletesteer me
closer to light
where leaves breathe and the wind
runs like a free bird, majestic
& healed
nice.. the wind running like a free bird is a really cool image... i also like the form with the three steps..works well with the poem..hmmm..i'm breathing with the leaves..
ReplyDeleteGorgeous. A lighted path, sometimes that's just what we need...beautiful thoughts and use of this form Grace.
ReplyDeleteYes - the cinquain works so well and the poem is like a path - I also like the image of the bird very much. k.
ReplyDelete..ah yes...let's celebrate into that coming of lighted paths... let's celebrate life once again... amazing Grace...(and yes.. it's a song too..) smiles..
ReplyDelete'cast me without shadows'
ReplyDeleteis the star for me.
A prayer.
where the leave breathe and the wind runs like a free bird....would not mind visiting such a path grace....smiles...happy saturday to you...
ReplyDeleteThis is your style - melodic, soothing, romantic, beautiful. I like the way the verses move, creating a path for our thoughts. Really nice Grace.
ReplyDeleteWonderful Grace, A "lighted path " always makes it easier for one to find their way !! I enjoyed this !!
ReplyDeleteSuch a path I would like all nice and bright, without any snow in sight.
ReplyDeleteI love being cast without shadows and being steered to the light. No greater gift could there be!
ReplyDeleteI like the way you've added to the form, with your 'me' and '&'. This poem looks out, beyond and into the wider world with hope and optimism.
ReplyDeletea beautiful set. a beautiful prayer. Amen. So mote it Be.
ReplyDeletewonderful. <3
ReplyDeletelovely greets
maren anita
FASHION-MEETS-ART by Maren Anita
such a beautiful path - loved the rhythm and cadence to this - K
ReplyDeleteBeautiful. Love the cinquain and the photo!
ReplyDeleteVery pretty, Grace..the light on the path is important so we don't turn the wrong way or get lost in the dark...deep meaning here;)
ReplyDeletethese are gorgeous, Grace. i knew you would respond beautifully :)
ReplyDeleteSimply lovely,,,I would be happy on that path,,,
ReplyDeleteA vivid word painting, Grace. I especially love the last stanza. Very well done!
ReplyDeleteBeautiful... this flows like a little woodland stream...
ReplyDeleteI love the effortless way this reads ... really nice.
ReplyDeleteThese are great. I do think the second one is my favorite.
ReplyDeleteBeautiful - such vivid imagery - love the metaphors
ReplyDeleteA serene set of verse steps leading to the light. Nice pic.
ReplyDeleteback to say what a beautiful cinquain, which I didn't realize it was the first time I read it..;)
ReplyDeletereally nice Grace. Reads somewhat like an affirmation, love the images you bring forth. Great read. Thanks
ReplyDeleteBeautiful ... I loved the oath of light !!!
ReplyDeleteSometyhing rather special, this.
ReplyDeleteYes aptly named Grace and as you cut those puppet strings one by one freeing your limbs to move as you will them, dance with the breezes in the sunshine. I will not dance with you, a fat man dancing shakes the earth to much, but I will applaud your freedom and sense of self.
ReplyDeleteYour light touch with syllable-counted poetry is put to amazing effect in this poem sequence, Grace.
ReplyDeleteBeautiful, Grace. Happy Sunday :)
ReplyDeleteI loved this Grace! Especially the way it's structured! Very unique.
ReplyDelete0h Grace what a beautiful series!
ReplyDeleteLoved the structure and especially steer me closer to light. Beautiful.
ReplyDelete"where leaves breathe and the wind
ReplyDeleteruns like a free bird,"
loved it!
Wonderful in form and content. I love cinquain and you do it well.
ReplyDeleteBeautiful, Grace, just beautiful.
ReplyDeleteI espeically love how this ends. Very beautiful.
ReplyDeleteyou do a good job casting like a shadow and then being steered into the light
ReplyDeletehades gate
I love the form, the cinquain, gosh I remember we had to write these in school...it was cool, they don't seem to write poetry much in school anymore (pity)...anyway this is lovely, the path, the steps... I really liked the second, it reminded me of those costume balls and the ending to run like a free bird...quite beautiful indeed.
ReplyDeleteI love the whole thing especially the ending. It speaks of all the prayers I have had for my oldest daughter that she might be free and healed.
ReplyDeleteI enjoyed your take on the prompt :D
ReplyDeleteI love how you captured so many moods and ended with
so much hope!
I <3 the ending
"the wind runs like a free bird"
ReplyDeleteLOVE that! great response to the prompt, Grace!
♥
wild. wonderful.
ReplyDeleteNice!
ReplyDeleteLight, breathing leaves, wind helping bird to fly, freedom, majesty, and healing! Wonder WHY I am so attracted to third word group.
ReplyDeleteThoughtful. Thanks, grace
I guess we all are longing to head toward the light as we go through this life into the next...this is beautiful in form and words Grace. :-)
ReplyDeleteBeautiful words, Grace. I adore that last one. It sings!
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