Sunday, April 1, 2012

Deserted



emptiness stretched far 
shorelines deserted of birds,
bread crumbs turned to dust

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palm trees drooping low,
listening to footsteps, but 
nothing whispered back  


Posted for Haiku Heights:  Deserted - This is part of National Poetry Writing Month - Day 2


Picture credit:   Reena from Missing Moments

20 comments:

  1. i liked it..
    the second part is very very good and 'insightful' shall i say..
    nice haiku..

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  2. Enjoyed these haiku very much. A favorite line is "nothing whispered back"
    I have been on deserted shore lines too and your lines bring back some memories.

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  3. Descriptive haiku! The last lines in both haiku resonate with a powerful, intimate twist! Delightful!

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  4. Solitude can be grand sometimes, although a whisper back would occasionally be nice.

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  5. Love it! Exactly the beach when deserted.

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    1. Thank you for the lovely picture ~ I am glad you like it ~

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  6. the best way to describe a deserted place..emotions in full blast when we are left alone in this deserted place..

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  7. The second one took my breath away and I could hear all the unheard whispering sounds.. wonderfuk Grace.. Well done..

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  8. vivid imagery...love the flow of words..

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  9. for me 'bread crumbs turned to dust' was such a classic!! love it the way you say it...simply captures the whole scene! Love it!

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  10. Nice set of haiku and really beautiful image:)

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  11. Quiet and stillness lend for the moment when one can hear the whispers.
    Sometimes I hear whispers in my stillness, eyelids closed but can see the Universe. 8-)

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  12. What I'd really like to see is dust turning back into bread crumbs! :)

    Deserted Branches

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  13. very creatively expressed ~thanks, namaste, ^_^

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  14. I could feel that deserted feeling you described...Thanks for sharing :)

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  15. I like them both. "bread crumbs turned to dust"...a fabulous line.

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  16. nothing whispered back ... gud 1 :)

    DESERTED

    http://surbhichugh.blogspot.in/2012/04/deserted.html

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  17. How wonderful, such a lovely place to be, looks like paradise.

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  18. Very nice
    Peace,
    Siggi in Downeast Maine

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  19. Beautifully expressed, Grace!! Both are strong choices to illustrate the prompt!

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