her reply came
in the mail, faint of ink,
obscure as spiralling sky
~0~0~0
across the hallway,
his words echoed
colder than distant star
~0~0~0
her tears fell into
the bottomless well,
unanswered prayers
Posted for Haiku Heights: Milky Way - This is part of the September Challenge.
I struggled with this prompt and might skip on some days to write about other things ~Thanks for the visit~
Very unique takes...beautiful..each one..Well done Grace..
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Not the outcome she really wanted, but at least the truth came out however cold.
ReplyDeleteNice. There's a haunting sadness in these. Those are feelings most of us have experienced.
ReplyDeleteA different one ... loved it :-)
ReplyDeletew-o-w....i am running short of words...this is simply beyond my thought..its super beautiful..thankyou for sharing :)
ReplyDeleteBeautiful and unique take on the prompt. I feel the loss in each one.
ReplyDeleteWow! An entire narrative in 9 tiny lines with images. I do believe that mine is the perfect answer to yours!
ReplyDeleteNice. I could hear the quill in the ink well, brittle footsteps, a door, partially closing, quiet tears.
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I found this sad and touching, a sense of misunderstanding and inability to communicate - but then I am a romantic!
ReplyDeleteWow! Haiku and a short story too! Very nice.
ReplyDeleteouch...that middle one stings a bit...def a sadness that resonates through this grace....i like that each touches a different level of communication as well...
ReplyDeleteYour haiku are beautiful even in their sadness. You have such a gift for writing them.
ReplyDeleteWhat a beautiful series, Grace. Such sweet sadness.
ReplyDeleteHeartbreaking, each one! all so true and poignantly captured.
ReplyDeleteAwesome series of haiku ... had some difficulties to adjust to this way of using the prompt, but you did well. Chapeau
ReplyDeleteI like the words colder than a distant star. All of the lines are wonderful.
ReplyDeleteHaunting - lovely. 'Faint of ink' sounds mysterious to me. I like this.
ReplyDeleteHmm hmm unanswered prayers and bottomless well, nicely done!
ReplyDeletelovely haiku's......tinted with sadness....
ReplyDeleteWhat a beautiful metaphoric take on the prompt. A neat story told with sad undertones. Very well done!
ReplyDelete1 and 2.......verrry nice!
ReplyDeleteBeautiful lines.
These are very sad, Grace. I struggled with this prompt too as I try to marry two word prompts together in one post. I'm not participating every day though - only on some days just to give my support to both Leo and Rick in their September project.
ReplyDeleteUnaswered prayers...
ReplyDeleteLovely!
http://locomente.blogspot.in/2012/09/milky-way.html
So poignant
ReplyDeleteits sad ..but it touched my soul..
ReplyDeleteI like the image of the faint of ink.. deep..
ReplyDeletenice write liked them
ReplyDeleteI liked the last one, Grace.. milky way as a bottomless well... Thank you for sharing, and yes, this was a tricky one, I agree.
ReplyDeleteHope your muse is kind to you as always :) I await your haiku to read, whenever you post.
Very tricky prompt -- you pulled it off effortlessly ... my favorite of the set is the last one!! :)
ReplyDeleteThank you for your visit.
I like the first two stanzas best! Beautifully expressed!
ReplyDeleteI love this line: "obscure as spiralling sky"
As always well done ;D
LOvely I relly love Grace:)
ReplyDeleteA unique take! ♥ it..
ReplyDeleteInteresting prompt. You did terrific!
ReplyDeleteLovely!
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