her love poems,
sweeter than lemon cake
topped with fresh strawberries
~0~0~
his parting words
grated like lemon rinds on cake,
bittersweet fruit
~0~0~
chocolate dessert,
warm as honey, drips slowly
her hardened heart
Posted for : Haiku Heights - Creation - Happy Friday ~and Haiku My Heart
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It seems as though his apathy has hardened her heart. That is what it seems. Hence the comparison to grated lemon zest. Very powerful words. Very realistic as well.
ReplyDeleteAmazing words ... you have made this haiku a delicious concoction of love and pain !!!
ReplyDeleteYum! Except for the rinds
ReplyDeleteI love your themes and a dripping chocolate heart.
Have a great weekend, Grace
Rick
It's Friday and my mind is on food and fun :-)
DeleteThanks for the visit Rick ~ Have a good weekend as well ~
Very delicious..loved each bite..
ReplyDeleteRS:)
I found these slightly chilling, but the end = good writing, the last one especially.
ReplyDeleteI try to be creative with my haiku ~ Whether it comes across as warm or delicious or chilling, its really up to the reader ~
DeleteThanks for your visits ~
Wow, you know how love and heart ache combine to fill our lonely lives. Excellent work.
ReplyDeleteMelanie
They are all lovely, but the last one really floored me!
ReplyDeleteI really enjoyed how you combined the creations of sweet confections with a strong emotional message. Well done.
ReplyDeletenice...i like how you captured the various perspectives...and split hers with his...
ReplyDeleteEdible haiku! :-)
ReplyDeleteVery creative! I'd never have thought to associate a break-up with food, but it works perfectly. I like your haiku creation.
ReplyDeleteGives me new meaning to dessert as strawberry shortcake is my favorite. Remind me to never use chocolate! Great use of words and photo. This may have specific meaning to an event to someone. I don't need to know who or even if it does, just evokes that thought.
ReplyDeletePeace
I enjoyed your haiku today. The middle one is my favourite. I understand "bittersweet fruit"
ReplyDeleteYummy description of love and life!
ReplyDeleteBeautiful, Grace. Your words and picture make me so hungry.....
ReplyDeleteSurely used the food with this brood to a sound so sweet at least for the treat.
ReplyDeleteBeautiful set of haiku .... an appatizer (i don't know if i have written that word ok)
ReplyDeleteyou never fail to amaze me with your words...awesome haiku!
ReplyDeleteDEEEEEEEEEEEEElicious Haiku. LOVE LOVE LOVE how the chef cooked them up.
ReplyDeleteP.S. you made me hungry - my highest compliment
Delicious haiku Grace...Beautiful comparisons....
ReplyDeleteWoww.....so creative and yummy.....enjoyed well....
ReplyDeleteGreat use of lemons and strawberry hearts in your haiku and photo... I do hope however, that the chocolate melts her heart again and that she can open to a sweeter love...
ReplyDeleteExcellent culinary metaphors.
ReplyDeleteFood can be such a joy to write on! Leaves a wonderful taste in the mouth! Nicely Grace!
ReplyDeleteHank
Delicious...at times the bitter-sweet combination also tastes good...
ReplyDeleteIntriguing words that leaves me linger on and read again... I love when that happens! Enjoy your weekend!
ReplyDeleteGreat..you really wrote these haikus deliciously.
ReplyDeleteAhhhh yummy creation. I like lemon rinds on cake, both actual and the way you put it on your haiku.
ReplyDeleteOh, so sweet, yet bitter. I love!
ReplyDeleteHardened hearts don't know much about indulging in sweetness...
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Oh such a nice sequence and turn of events of lost love!!! Have a great remainder of your weekend. :)
ReplyDeleteBrilliant!
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ReplyDeleteyour haiku are brilliantly crafted, and deliciously luscious!
thank you grace for your place in my haiku heart.
These are wonderful! I love the way they began sweet and turn bitter. :-)
ReplyDeletesad and beautiful dear Grace.
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