Migrating Siberian Cranes over Himalayas
white against white
sky is an open road
above ice-capped mountains
wild is the call of wind
that rushes in our lungs
as we cross continents & rivers
to where the sun greens
every blade of grass, browns earth-
worms, yellows fish in marshlands
we fear not the crossing
the flock is brotherhood
marking the journey old as sea
our wingspan fight
against eagles and vultures
yet we fear not
as we smell rain clouds
above the marsh & bogs
as we travel
on and on
don't lead us astray
with your hunting games
for our prized plumes
for our tender meat
leave us
in our untamed earth
dense, unsettled as clouds
with the wind as our choir
we move as kindred souls
in silent geometry
Let this be not our
last
j o u r
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Posted for D'verse Poets Pub - We are writing about ecopoetry ~ Sadly these long-lived cranes is on the list of endangered species as its population has greatly diminished in the last 3 decades. Thanks for the visit ~
So very sad. So many beautiful creatures are nearly dying off. Humans are so often heartless or unthinking, and all of creation suffers.
ReplyDeleteI think we crave too much... we the meat or plumes.. and then one day the silent... when it's all too late. Yet it might come back and hurt us...
ReplyDeleteOh Grace, you make me feel their plight, their flight....and their ultimate fall from the sky.....so beautifully written.
ReplyDeleteThis is soo beautiful! Love the call to nature and yearning of the journey we lead. Excellent write :D
ReplyDeleteLots of love,
Sanaa
Incredible message, & POV, & for a time we cruised the sky, had wings, morphed into bird song; lovely & sad, & nicely done--the perfect illustration for your prompt. Mine is still pedantic perhaps.
ReplyDeleteLovely poem, lovely example of the form. This makes me feel their plight and wish for more wings in the sky. Because of so much building around our island of county road, there are fewer birds, squirrels, deer, night critters. I often cry for their loss and wonder if I am the only one who mourns.
ReplyDeleteI loved your line /marking the journey old as sea/.
ReplyDeleteWriting from the POV of the cranes made this all the more poignant. I couldn't help but think of what happened to the Buffalo in the North American plains.
ReplyDeleteOH! I am breathless at that fading "journey." Stunned.
ReplyDeletePerfect.
There is nothing more inspiring than the cranes flight.
ReplyDeleteDo I dare commenting ? cuz all ur closed club peeps commented already ... guess I will comment anyway ...
ReplyDelete(deep breath, cat cu u will not be bullied by anyone) ... Lovely and somewhat heart breaking poem, friend, Grace ... reminds me of my childhood and what we went through while travelling from north to south over and over again ... just like the migrant birds ...k ...'nough said ... smiles ... Always, Love, cat.
Humans sure screw up life for so many species out there.
ReplyDeleteThis is so visually beautiful and birdlike before even diving into the actual words.
ReplyDeleteOh Grace your poem is beautiful. I felt their cry. So sad. I love the way you end it with visual outline of words.
ReplyDeleteSad but beautifully written. So raw with emotions. Bravo.
ReplyDeleteSo poetic and lyrical - but what a sad ending. Suzanne of Art and Life.
ReplyDeleteLovely display of poem. With ever vanishing nature, the birds are too being affected.
ReplyDeleteYou tell such an all too familiar story as one after the other of our animals fail to thrive in our changing world. I LOVE how you ended your poem with the fading letters, Grace, genius!
ReplyDeleteThe fade-out of journey at the end was a brilliant touch.
ReplyDeletesMiLes.. damming
ReplyDeletethe Human race
might be easy
if not
for the
rest of
Nature iN
balance.. now..
and of course
damming.. just
means keeping
humans at bay
iN balance..
sMiLes
aGaiN..:)
the plea in the last line makes us aware of the human greed and gradual dwindling away of the paradise...so poignant...beautiful Grace...
ReplyDeleteYou have painted many beautiful images, I loved those last lines and the way it drags at the end....a message so well conveyed....
ReplyDeleteThis reaches the heart with the wispy language and photo and puts us in the cranes' place, in the air, talking with one another and is almost like a graceful prayer.
ReplyDeleteHi Grace! I was flying with the cranes! I love the shape of this poem, as well as the gorgeous imagery and sorrowful tone.
ReplyDeleteI was originally thinking about something similar with wolves, but then changed my mind in favour of a shape poem about trees! Am I allowed to add an old poem about elephants as well as the one about trees?
Very beautifully put together. I love the short lines and the ending. I think eco poems need some 'punch line' to challenge us. We are losing so much of this wonderful world. I did watch a documentary on the cranes once. An amazing journey
ReplyDeleteAbsolutely stunning. First you take me on a travelogue, as if I am one of these magnificent creatures, experience their joy of soaring and migration. And then you speak to the reader in warning....and the formatting at the end is so effective. Very very well done!
ReplyDeletewild is the call of wind
ReplyDeletethat rushes in our lungs
as we cross continents & rivers
to where the sun greens
every blade of grass, browns earth-
worms, yellows fish in marshlands
I am enjoying the imagery
Yes, preserve these beauty... Love the visual effect in the poem's ending, by the way.
ReplyDeleteYour poem brings tears, Grace...truly beautiful and affecting/effective. Thank you.
ReplyDeleteI love this
"we fear not the crossing
the flock is brotherhood
marking the journey old as sea"
the shape that the lines take and the closing with the journey trailed out and fading...breaks my heart.
Beautifully deep.
ReplyDeleteBeautifully done concrete piece, Grace. I could see this published.
ReplyDeleteGorgeous wording and imagery, Grace, sensitively told from the viewpoint of the cranes. What we would learn if we could, indeed, communicate with the other creatures of our universe.
ReplyDeleteThis is truly beautiful,,,
ReplyDeleteWhat a gorgeous poem. From the title to the last line.
ReplyDeleteGreetings from London.
What a kind expression of the longing to just be allowed to live. Maybe more humans should feel the same way.
ReplyDeleteI'm sad that those cranes are on the list for endangered species. You did such an amazing job to capture this feeling and their beauty in your poem - at the same time. Beautifully written. It's very deep and touching.
ReplyDeleteThank you, Grace, for your loving and caring comment on my gratitude post! You are amazing!
Have a wonderful week :)
Sending lot of hugs to you,
Beate
thanks for the prompt, Grace.
ReplyDeletethere is much sadness these days... perhaps it's the winter... ~