blue waves
couldn't break ancient stones,
filled with sadness
~0~0~0
cries by seagulls
ripple the serene lake,
empty of boats
~0~0~0
leave me here
on island stones by dawn:
hollowed tree
Posted for Haiku Heights: Loneliness ~ This is part of the September Challenge of HH.
"leave me here"
ReplyDeletespeaks louder! amazingly crafted haiku!
I liked the metaphor you've used: Empty of boats.
ReplyDeleteSolitude/loneliness enlightened.
"empty of boats" definitely evokes loneliness for me...
ReplyDeleteLoneliness of Stars
Beautiful photograph; and your words create a peaceful scene I would like to visit and stay in for the weekend.
ReplyDeletenice..the first one is def evocative and my fav of the three...the second one def conveys the emptiness...nicely done grace...have a lovely weekend
ReplyDeleteWell conceived haiku :-)
ReplyDeleteLots of desperation and frustration in this, as well as loneliness. Proper haiku (I think!) - communicating feelings and atmosphere by description alone. The middle one stands out for me.
ReplyDeleteblue waves..filled with sadness: talks of loneliness silently. Amazingly written.
ReplyDeleteBeautiful haiku and image. My favourite is the last. "leave me here" and "hollowed tree". Sometimes I feel like a hollowed tree :-)
ReplyDeletelove your haikus Grace!:)
ReplyDeletelove leave me here part!
Stuck in an isle all by ones self, can be quite the despairing way then again it looks like a swimable bay.
ReplyDeleteBeautiful!
ReplyDeleteLovely set. The second is my favorite.
ReplyDeleteLoneliness is sad, as you have depicted here. I enjoy reading these.
ReplyDeleteAwww... perfect! Crying seagulls do ripple a quiet lake. I like your entire set.
ReplyDeleteAh!...Beautiful three examples that show loneliness...I loved the first one most.....
ReplyDeletea stone sad within
ReplyDeletea lake emptied of boats
a hollowed log canoe
Loneliness could be content with this homage!
all three are created beautifully..
ReplyDeletethree haunting portrayals of loneliness ~~
ReplyDeletefantastic writing.....first one pulled all my attention....
ReplyDeletePowerful use of the Haiku form to project the despair of loneliness. Nicely crafted!
ReplyDeleteVery pretty haiku. k.
ReplyDeletethis is very captivating.
ReplyDeleteWow! This set makes me so happy, feels like I am there ... the picture and your haiku are pulling me towards it.
ReplyDeletewow!
ReplyDeleteBeautiful, Grace. There are many words here that pack a real punch of loneliness. On the other hand, they might just as easily speak of peace. And now that I'm thinking of that, I'm also thinking it really depends on the visitor's perspective, doesn't it?
ReplyDeleteThis is amazing!!! Comparison was very nice.
ReplyDeleteMmmm! A lake in it's finest behaviour.nice write, grace!
ReplyDeleteRick
I love the weightier feeling mingled with seagull songs! Fabulous !
ReplyDelete