he walked backward, while i
walked forward, walk(ing) afar, looked
back, i checked his side(ways),
while barely keeping straight face
i noticed his face straight (too)
A 5 x 5 square poem, which can be also be read up and down.
he walked backward, while i
walked forward, walk(ing) afar, looked
back i glance(d) his side(ways),
while barely holding straight face
i noticed his face straight (too)
Posted for D'verse Poets Pub: Square Poem - based on my afternoon walks
Picture credit: here
ha, nicely done you had me going all kinda directions...its a really hard form....
ReplyDeleteIt was a fun form ~ The guy really walked backward ~
DeleteThanks for the visit Brian ~
Great twists and turns through the form (I do wish I'd taken more liberties) and awesome picture.
ReplyDeleteI peeked at some poems so I can have an idea ~ Thanks for the visit ~
Deletethis could be an ice dance routine!! cool.
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I never thought it that way, but yes, why not ~
DeleteWow that was great work, sure must have taken a bit to do and as always five by five are you.
ReplyDeleteYes, some time to fit it right, though in the end, it turned out fun ~
Deleteoh you and Brian beat me with this type, so creative!
ReplyDeleteSpying, dancing, cool.
ReplyDeleteI never thought of spying...but it could work too ~ Thanks Susan ~
DeleteBeautifully done, Grace! I'm in awe.
ReplyDeleteThe neat thing, I find, is to have this poem and not tell anyone it's a square poem. The aha! moment that a reader gets when he realizes that he can read it vertically is just amazing.
ReplyDeleteAnd your poem goes backwards and forwards up and down too. Wonderful. k.
ReplyDeleteyou surely did a nice walk with this one grace...smiles
ReplyDeleteThere were all kinds of steps and glances going on here, Grace...fun!
ReplyDeleteYour poem is amazing!
ReplyDeleteamazing one Grace...Thanks for introducing this new style... :) :) :)
ReplyDeleteTerrific Square poem Grace. Love the character you drew here, really paints a vivid image of the scene. Great read. Thanks
ReplyDeleteThat's amazing! Excellent job with this prompt! so clever--
ReplyDeleteVery cool, walking, glancing. Playful and fun, feels like a deliberate suppression of happy expression that somehow make this scene cute. :)
ReplyDeleteNice job on a challenging prompt. :)
Excellent job, Grace :)
ReplyDeleteI dig it. Very creative way to describe the scene. I picture two coy people pretending not to like each other but glancing up from time to time to see if the other is looking.
ReplyDeleteYours was very creative and a different take on the form. First one I've read when the subjects were not trying to get free. Ha. Loved it.
ReplyDeleteI love how you are about relationships. Here you have used this very sneaky form to convey those sneaky little peeks that lovers, admirers often take at each other. Nicely done.
ReplyDeleteWow! This is a really cool poem form!
ReplyDeleteYou must enjoy some really good walks :)
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