clear glass window stoops over city's freeway
where cars and trucks rumble and sprint like ants
on brown veined leaves, underneath summer sky
whistles and tires drum the roads like bees gathering
honey before the butterfly net catches its golden tails,
scaring small black birds perched on the maple tree
nearby the flock of geese amble between parked cars
like a solemn procession for the saints or the brown cross,
babies following the father robed in white and grey
above maze of roads, she comes to peek at my window,
checking the traffic she says in her soft wistful voice,
but always craning to see her cottage, a dot in the blue lake
her face is apple stained with divorce papers and struggles
of everyday cares, but her eyes twinkle in a merry dance,
stomach full of laughter, as she thinks of retiring in 7 years
my eye catches the shade of the day, bright cantaloupes,
ripe mangoes sliced sweet and plump, framing office cube,
bare of personal touches, clearly a pit stop in my book of travels
i don't see a white cottage by the lake, but the arms of sun
growing longer, brighter in orange twilight. a thunderstorm
is coming tonight but for now, i like the view from my chair
Posted for D'verse Poets Pub: Where in the World am I
and Poets United: Labyrinth
picture credit: here
Love all the vivid images and also vivid colours through all of this. The twinkling eyes bought a smile ... all of this is gentle, lovely.
ReplyDeleteVery nice, Grace. You brought the view from your window to life.
ReplyDeleteI love the view from your window, the glorious photo (I once had walls like that!), the apple faced woman whose history is written on her face (like me!), and all of the wonderfu8l images that draw the reader right into the sense of place. Lovely.
ReplyDeleteGrace, so good how you integrated the setting and then unfold a story of sadness and loss. The contrast between the beauty of nature, the traffic and the woman works so well.
ReplyDeleteGrace- You have captured so many lovely observations. I especially like the second and fifth stanzas and the geese. Love the ending, too.
ReplyDeleteYou have really created a vivid scene here...evoking character AND setting beautifully, Grace!
ReplyDeletethis is wonderful grace...love your descriptions and the contrast between her little cottage and the bustle of the rest....your description of her though is my fav...her face is apple stained with divorce papers and struggles
ReplyDeleteof everyday cares, but her eyes twinkle in a merry dance,
stomach full of laughter...nice...i want to meet her...
Love, really love this! Grace
ReplyDeleteThe view from the chair is so important--always! Great use of simile and metaphor--and set the stage beautifully--
ReplyDeletevery cool how you take us with you to the office, right into the moment...esp. loved that you made us see your colleague...her face is apple stained with divorce papers and struggles
ReplyDeleteof everyday cares, but her eyes twinkle in a merry dance,
stomach full of laughter..this is great
It's wonderful to be moving along with you Grace! Your narration is so real, true to form. We were there. Great write!
ReplyDeleteHank
The picture is perfect, the writing, terrific....I feel lucky to have come across your blog :-)
ReplyDeleteA painterly view of the world revitalising the shades within! A sense of sad escapism empowers the poem with an undercurrent of drama!
ReplyDeleteIf I read this right, a cornucopia of memories are spread out beyond your window in dazzling array.
ReplyDeleteI like the idea of the arms of the sun growing longer and longer. :)
ReplyDeleteA poem, a short story, a life time all in seven stanzas...beautiful Grace!
ReplyDeleteYou sure captured life in little snippets here and there, as it goes on, hope your having a nice day.
ReplyDeleteThis is beautiful. It reads like a journey through life, all from your chair. I like the imagery you use. Really nice.
ReplyDeleteVivid descriptive images that paint a beautiful world after being cooped up in an office...the sense of freedom is palpable...love this :)
ReplyDeletehmmm, this is a bit of a teaser, I think though the clue is oerhaps in the photo that stands at the top of the poem. The mixture of reality and fantasy is nicely crafted into a poem that's satisfying in the way it teases us with the reality fantasy interplay. There's anxiety and suffering here, but they are caught up in another overriding reality, which somehow cushions their force. A very lovely poem that grows and grows into something quite wonderful.
ReplyDelete"apple stained with divorce papers and every day cares" absolutely gets my attention - I may dream about her tonight.
ReplyDeleteThis is one tremendous stanza:-
ReplyDeleteher face is apple stained with divorce papers and struggles
of everyday cares, but her eyes twinkle in a merry dance,
stomach full of laughter, as she thinks of retiring in 7 years
Don't know why I picked out that one: they all are!
Unique way of taking this prompt. I liked it.
ReplyDeletebut the arms of sun
ReplyDeletegrowing longer, brighter in orange twilight.
Love this and so many of the unique images that you liken to nature form that world that is lacking in nature...you fill it to the brim with beauty!
I love the view from your chair! I love so many lines, but
ReplyDelete"her face is apple stained...." said, so much~
The lines of life mark us, yet hopeful most will still long
for the arms of the sun!
Well Done