Thursday, June 28, 2012

The walk




he   walked  backward,  while    i
walked  forward,   walk(ing)   afar,   looked        
back,  i   checked  his   side(ways), 
while    barely  keeping  straight      face                                                  
i    noticed   his  face  straight (too)      



A 5 x 5 square poem, which can be also be read up and down.   


he                  walked         backward,      while           i
walked           forward,       walk(ing)        afar,           looked        
back              i                   glance(d)        his              side(ways), 
while             barely           holding           straight       face                                                  
i                    noticed         his                 face            straight (too)         





Posted for D'verse Poets Pub:   Square Poem - based on my afternoon walks 


Picture credit:   here

28 comments:

  1. ha, nicely done you had me going all kinda directions...its a really hard form....

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    1. It was a fun form ~ The guy really walked backward ~

      Thanks for the visit Brian ~

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  2. Great twists and turns through the form (I do wish I'd taken more liberties) and awesome picture.

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    1. I peeked at some poems so I can have an idea ~ Thanks for the visit ~

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  3. this could be an ice dance routine!! cool.



    zealous wives

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    1. I never thought it that way, but yes, why not ~

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  4. Wow that was great work, sure must have taken a bit to do and as always five by five are you.

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    1. Yes, some time to fit it right, though in the end, it turned out fun ~

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  5. oh you and Brian beat me with this type, so creative!

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    1. I never thought of spying...but it could work too ~ Thanks Susan ~

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  7. Beautifully done, Grace! I'm in awe.

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  8. The neat thing, I find, is to have this poem and not tell anyone it's a square poem. The aha! moment that a reader gets when he realizes that he can read it vertically is just amazing.

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  9. And your poem goes backwards and forwards up and down too. Wonderful. k.

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  10. you surely did a nice walk with this one grace...smiles

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  11. There were all kinds of steps and glances going on here, Grace...fun!

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  12. amazing one Grace...Thanks for introducing this new style... :) :) :)

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  13. Terrific Square poem Grace. Love the character you drew here, really paints a vivid image of the scene. Great read. Thanks

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  14. That's amazing! Excellent job with this prompt! so clever--

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  15. Very cool, walking, glancing. Playful and fun, feels like a deliberate suppression of happy expression that somehow make this scene cute. :)

    Nice job on a challenging prompt. :)

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  16. I dig it. Very creative way to describe the scene. I picture two coy people pretending not to like each other but glancing up from time to time to see if the other is looking.

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  17. Yours was very creative and a different take on the form. First one I've read when the subjects were not trying to get free. Ha. Loved it.

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  18. I love how you are about relationships. Here you have used this very sneaky form to convey those sneaky little peeks that lovers, admirers often take at each other. Nicely done.

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  19. Wow! This is a really cool poem form!

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  20. You must enjoy some really good walks :)

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