"Everyday in every way I’m getting better and better" - Emile Coue
Thursday, July 30, 2020
slow dance
frayed daffodil leaves
thirsting under summer sun-
orange cardinals hop
among the brambles,
cones & wilting rose bushes-
wild bunnies stop
wary of red fox
& coyotes lurking about-
sky- dragon of clouds
i hold
spring bulbs for fall's planting-
sunset fades- slow dance
Posted for dVerse Poets Pub - Haiku sequence, hosted by Frank Tassone. Thanks for your visit and comments.
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I love the use of colour, Grace, the orange and red add to the heat already evoked by the thirsting leaves and wilting rose bushes. Thank you for reminding me to look for spring bulbs to plant.
ReplyDeleteEverything is slow in the heat, but the year turns and those bulbs in your hand will soon be in the ground.
ReplyDeleteI like how you continued thoughts along the series and the vivid splashes of color.
ReplyDeleteThis is so beautifully haunting. I especially love the use of color, such as orange and red, that contributes to the imagery built around in this poem. It's absolutely fascinating and so easy to immerse into like a dream. Very powerful words here; I especially enjoyed the ending. So impactful, evoking an even stronger theme of hope. What a beautiful take on the prompt. I love your haiku sequence.
ReplyDeleteI love the colors here Grace.
ReplyDeleteBeautifully done Grace, I love how all the movements slow down in the warmth of Summer xxx
ReplyDeletehighly animated, a very lively sequence
ReplyDeleteMuchđź’–love
Evocative, flowing imagery portray the iconic moments of a late summer's day. Well done!
ReplyDeleteI particularly like this part:
ReplyDeletewary of red fox
& coyotes lurking about-
sky- dragon of clouds
Each stanza creates a beautiful word picture. A joy to read!
ReplyDeleteI like the movement and pauses in this. Lovely.
ReplyDeleteLovely
ReplyDeletespring bulbs for fall's planting-
ReplyDeletesunset fades- slow dance
A beginning and tapering to a leisurely round at the end. Beautiful sequence Grace!
Hank
I really like your orange cardinals hopping among the brambles, Grace.
ReplyDelete"thirsting," "wilting," "sky- dragon," and finally "sunset fades- slow dance" -- All of these capture summer's heat so well.
ReplyDeleteThey each stand alone, but enrich each other. The ending is masterful.
ReplyDeleteA beautiful summer day. Love the daffodil bulbs in hand! Promise of new life...
ReplyDeleteAugust is in-between...waiting.
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