"Everyday in every way I’m getting better and better" - Emile Coue
Monday, January 30, 2017
Take one: a free map
this darkness will pass, sudden rain storm-
let's ride out, you and i
where dawn is a well
we're freely drawing with icy breath
see light chattering,
piercing
through winter fog-
filling pockets, trunks, buckets full-
let's link hands, ink-pressed with map of stars
Posted for D'verse Poets Pub - Hosted by Bjorn Rudberg - Quadrille - 44 word post with the word DAWN. Thanks for the visit.
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Link on up one by one, an alignment to all
ReplyDeleteLOVE LOVE LOVE that last line! Dawn as a well...reach deep and it shall give you warmth and love...
ReplyDeleteink-pressed with map of stars....such a beautiful image! :)
I love this hopeful poem... we need to wait for dawn... but it's always darkest right before.
ReplyDeleteI love this Grace 'let's ride out, you and i where dawn is a well' and 'let's link hands, ink-pressed with map of stars' - truly beautiful! :o)
ReplyDeleteA refreshing piece, like the early morning dew against the skin.
ReplyDeleteDelightful connections here. Very uplifting.
ReplyDeleteI like the image you create with 'dawn is a well' there's hope there and our map of stars...beautiful.
ReplyDeleteHope springs inexorably in your breast it seems; lovely quadrille. Yes, your last line is killer. I like the lines /see light chattering/piercing/.
ReplyDeleteOh that last line. Just beautiful finish to a wonderful poem.
ReplyDeleteThat last line is a gem. Truly.
ReplyDeleteI really like your title and the whole idea of a free map. "Where dawn is a well" and the idea of filling everything you can with it. <3
ReplyDeleteThat last line is heavenly
ReplyDeleteJust loved the ending... this needs to be read more than once
ReplyDeleteLove, really love this Grace, beauty!
ReplyDeletelove the image of light chattering..just beautiful.
ReplyDeleteI liked the idea of a map of stars on the couple's linked hands.
ReplyDeleteWords of lovers; Where there's always light
ReplyDeleteOh yes, I want one of those maps too!
ReplyDeleteGorgeous....so in love with this...!
ReplyDeletethis is so enchanting. <3 <3 <3
ReplyDeleteI love the invitation to take a free map, which hooked me immediately, and the idea of dawn as a well where you can draw different kinds of weather. I love the pace of the poem, which leaves the reader breathless until that final invitation:
ReplyDelete'let's link hands, ink-pressed with map of stars'
How could anyone refuse?
Oh wow!!! I soooo love this part,
ReplyDelete"let's link hands, ink-pressed with map of stars"
<3
The imagery is flawless Grace. Though old men like me are burdened for need of a heavy coat in the chill dawn.
ReplyDeletelet's link hands, ink-pressed with map of stars... oh yes!!❤️ Beautiful, beautiful work, Grace!
ReplyDeleteLove the light chattering...like even the sun is cold.
ReplyDeleteAbsolutely beautiful, Grace. Has to be one of my favorites of yours. This speaks so much to love. Jane
ReplyDeleteThis fits well with the cold weather we've been having, but with a hint of hope for the dawn to come. Very nice.
ReplyDeleteThis leaves me beautifully breathless:
ReplyDelete"where dawn is a well
we're freely drawing with icy breath"
Stunning imagery, Grace. Such a visual read! Love it!
ReplyDeleteI too love the last lone here Grace--just gorgeeous
ReplyDeletelovely imagery. :-)
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ReplyDeletewe're freely drawing with icy breath
see light chattering,
piercing
a stunning stanza - breath taking - beautiful
I'll take one, thank you! Lovely!
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