I'd like to buy
the world a poem
for all 365 days, I
will not keep it
company but will
let it tumble, rip,
crash, hobble, run,
crash, hobble, run,
slam, burst as autumn
red leaves drifting by
the river canal, falling
over bridges & archways
until the verses settle down:
a torchlight, bell, majestic river.
I'd like to give the world a view:
happiness, not bought & sugared,
nor snowed white as turtle doves
but simple yellow morning bloom.
Then I'd teach the world to sing
in perfect harmony with trees,
with each fading leaf color and
passing clouds. Because there's a
poem to be found even in empty
road, lonely mountain, rainy days,
rusted can, or walking hand in hand.
Life tastes good when you keep it real.
Picture credit: Daaynos
Shared with Poets United ~
Oh, I really love this, Grace, starting with the shape. For sure better to have it REAL rather than something created by advertising sloguns. Like the last line & agree with it: "Life tastes good when you keep it real."
ReplyDeleteAhh.. love the rusted can and hand in hand... so great in reference to Coca Cola... yes this was a great poem (and I hate the taste of Coke nowadays.
ReplyDeleteGreat use of the form for this beautiful poem Grace! "happiness, not bought & sugared" - I like this line.
ReplyDeleteha. great play of i's like to buy the world a coke...what a cool song that was eh? i think a poem would do it good as well....nice work in of the shape too...mmm life does taste good like that eh? very cool take grace....
ReplyDeletehappy sunday grace...smiles...
DeleteThis is amazing, Grace... love the shape, the message, the words. Hope you have a great weekend.
ReplyDeleteha - def. keep it real - coke or not - smiles... cool message grace
ReplyDeleteThis may have been the very first hippy ad! I sang with it, oh gosh. You put it to much better use here. Great trashed can pic too.
ReplyDeletehaha nice rift indeed at your sea, the shape makes it all the better
ReplyDeleteHere a good example of taking a slogan and adding so much to it. I really enjoyed this, Grace. Now, just do it!
ReplyDeleteDoubly-clever both in message and shape, kudos for this one, Grace. I love the concept, and the salute to poetics is heartfelt & as accurate as mortar on bricks; a grand take, a masterful job; thanks for sharing.
ReplyDelete"Life taste good when you keep it real"- beautifully done. Serene imagery and a really good lesson to become one with nature and enjoy life as it is.
ReplyDeleteDoubly-clever indeed! I would like to teach the world to sing in your way too!
ReplyDeleteAnna :o]
this is brilliant
ReplyDeleteand truly the first slogan that popped into my mind
"I'd like to teach the world"
Love it all, the shape and the whole reference to coke and the song. Nicely done.
ReplyDeleteGrace, I enjoyed this one and the design is great now I want a diet coke.
ReplyDeleteThis sounds lovely Grace:)
ReplyDeletehow the H-E-double-hockey-sticks did you make a bottle of the form while keeping true to the spirit of the write? Hope you have a great weekend, Grace ~ M
ReplyDeleteI saw someone doing this so I just followed the shape and used my own words ~ Its fun to do shaped poems ~ Thanks M ~
DeleteWow, this is really beautiful, nicely passed, I love ..until the verses settle down... the whole poem is Really imaginative!
ReplyDeleteVery innovative, Grace! Love the visual effect of the coke bottle. It sets the mood to follow through on the coke theme! Nicely!
ReplyDeleteHank
Great play on the old commercial. Loved it. :)
ReplyDelete'there's a poem to be found..." Love that line.
ReplyDeleteEven the shadow of a humble flower and a softening layer of rust, cannot wash away the thoughts of the damaging effects of the contents of that crumpled can.
ReplyDeleteTeaching the world to sing... the presumption of it.
Much prefer your eloquent and uplifting suggestions.
I love this, Grace :)
ReplyDeleteThis definitely was one of my favorite poems written for the 'slogan challenge.' I enjoyed a second read, Grace.
ReplyDeleteSo many slogans!! Most of them I don't even recognise. :)
ReplyDeletethis is really beautiful. loved the real happiness.
ReplyDelete"Life tastes good when you keep it real."
ReplyDeletethirst quenched.
The well-known words to the coke jingle are given a fresh start in your poem, Grace.
ReplyDeleteperfect idea for a poem Grace. beautiful...I really enjoy your poetry!
ReplyDeleteThis is awesome grace. What an artist you are. Glad you're writing again.
ReplyDeleteThis is a great riff off the commercial with a MUCH BETTER message! Love the shape too, which I only became aware of as I realized what I was reading. Pretty cool!
ReplyDeleteJust love this Grace! What a lovely message for the world.
ReplyDeleteThese are wonderful wishes, nice work Grace!
ReplyDeleteGrace, you handled this so deftly and perfectly. I loved the Coke commercial tie-in. So I get to blame you when I can't get that tune out of my head this evening...right? :) I loved this poem.
ReplyDeleteLovely, witty, last line sounds like hope...
ReplyDeleteVery cool take on the prompt!
ReplyDeleteOoh I love this, especially the first verse. All the things you'll let it do, coupled with red autumn leaves- it's beautiful memorable writing.
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ReplyDeletelove the last line....
Give it Grace! There is poetry in everything. God knows how easy that is to forget when mired in a colorless clueless world.
ReplyDeleteGrace, very well done piece here. I love the way it flows and the last line is unforgettable. Thank you so much for sharing.
ReplyDeletePleasant flowing poem here. Esp. with the pic all faded can, what a find.
ReplyDeleteGraceful write just like you. The real thing!
Very deftly handled, Grace. I don't drink Coke but have to say that it has great ad campaigns - and you've turned them on their head in a wonderful way. Thanks. k.
ReplyDeleteA wonderful weaving of familiar lyrics and themes, and fit to the image - amazingly good.
ReplyDeleteCoke may rot your teeth and your guts but it tastes great especially laced with rum!:)
ReplyDeleteOh my gosh, Grace, this just made it into my top five of yours!! I love how you did this. I was humming the song in my head as I read this. Of course I'm drinking my Coke too. =)
ReplyDeleteHave a beautiful week, my friend!!
Your version of the song is way more beautiful.
ReplyDeleteThis is wonderful, Grace. I love its shape and message.
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