red hibiscus by the gate opens up
you.... get roller coaster nightmares
(if) they dressed you in cream
(of) may your summer morning be bright
(but) this city is a chameleon
gather the weekday's leftovers
Posted for dVerse Poets Pub - MTB: Finding It First, hosted by Laura Bloomsbury. The lines above are from the first lines of my first poem in each month of 2022.
This is so very vivid..Love especially how it all come together in the last line
ReplyDeleteI think this prompt really suits your style of poetry, Grace. What a lovely ‘found’ poem!
ReplyDeleteso very well constructed Grace -the juxtaposition of the opening hibiscus and the time passing in minutes. The last stanza is delightful
ReplyDeleteThis is exquisitely drawn, Grace! Wow! The poem in its entirety is vivid and flows seamlessly 💘💘
ReplyDeleteNice one !!!
ReplyDeleteMuch❤love
Well done, Grace. An interesting set of lines.
ReplyDeleteThis has a natural flow one wouldn't know it was found poetry. The imagery is amazing.- Truedessa
ReplyDeleteI love how the last line pulled it all together. Perfectly moody! ☺️
ReplyDeleteYou tied these first lines together well. Excellent my friend. 🙂✌🏼❣️
ReplyDeletecaptures well the chameleon quality of each day, each year
ReplyDeleteJust perfect <3
ReplyDeleteYou strung this together brilliantly! 👏👏
ReplyDeleteSurreal but still somehow cohesive. I like how the colors of red, cream, and blue jump out and how they are linked with feelings.
ReplyDeleteoooh...that final stanza is amazing!
ReplyDeleteGood on...loved the way it ends
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