Tuesday, June 26, 2018

the world inside/outside






i, the day
you, the night

i, framing the sky with questions
you,  paving it with silence

i, penning words bursting out of seams
you, painting abstracts serene as midnight stars

i flee from bees lusting for roses and summer blooms
you are drenched in rain from monsoon storms 

my sun rises in pink over blue mirrored lake 
your sun sets in scattered inkblots of mystery

time races when we kiss 
                                      and twist                                       
time pauses when we spar 
                                      and part

the sweetness and bitterness 
                                      drives us mad
we zigzag and go off course but 
                                      love circles back (to)
                                      
this world of us, inside you
inside me, this world of us




Posted for dVerse Poets Pub - Poetics, Opposites Attract, or Do They?, hosted by Lillian.
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22 comments:

  1. I love this dance of opposites... in particular

    time races when we kiss
    and twist
    time pauses when we spar
    and part

    Love the sound of spar and part

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  2. This is fantastic....the juxtapositioning of I and you. So much wonderful descriptive imagery here in seeting out the differences.
    "i, penning words bursting out of seams" -- loving this line and as I read it, the words themselves "knock up" against each other...not wording that right. Penning could be as in penning in....and then bursting out of seams...so even within the one line for I there is some antithesis. And then the end comes all the way around....and they fit oh so well together into a world of us. A wonderful write to the prompt!

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  3. Nice lines: "my sun rises in pink over blue mirrored lake
    your sun sets in scattered inkblots of mystery"

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  4. This beautifully describes the dance of love - very well done!

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  5. Exactly what is meant by opposites attracting. Beautifully done.

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  6. oh this is lovely, Grace :) ladylee x

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  7. Round and round, but always coming back. Love can win out.

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  8. What a wonderous array of evocative images that embody yin and yang so profoundly! Wonderful write, Grace! :)

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  9. Wonderfully written, Grace! I love how your opposites are intertwined with love! Love even overcomes Opposites!!

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  10. Interesting poem form.. "I like"

    peace and love
    1ManView

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  11. This is stunning, Grace! I love how the rhythm of your antithesis ebbs and flows, with crescendo and diminuendo. I love the lines:
    'i, penning words bursting out of seams
    you, painting abstracts serene as midnight stars'
    and
    we zigzag and go off course but
    love circles back (to)

    this world of us, inside you
    inside me, this world of us'.

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  12. How romantic! and both of them complete each other.

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  13. Ah, deeply romantic. And I like the lines about coming together and breaking apart - they add a note of realism that makes this about a real relationship rather than an idealised one.

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  14. A beautiful and romantic write. You made opposites work!

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  15. This is beautiful! So many questions we have. So many answers given, but in so many ways we don't understand

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  16. ..framing the sky with questions..😊

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  17. my sun rises in pink over blue mirrored lake
    your sun sets in scattered inkblots of mystery

    This tells a lot of a relationship that may turn wild and painful to one stable and happy. Great opposites Grace!

    Hank

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  18. Wow, oh just simply wow!!! Romantic, sensual, bound togetherness, longing separateness, 1 + 1 = the circles of the world. Thank you for this stunning peace! 💜

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  19. Everyone needs to read this poem, it should be a law. All in favor... say TWIST. 🙂

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  20. This is wonderful. This is relationship.

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  21. Yes, I think this could be the instructions for the dance!! Enjoyed your write.

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