wakes up early in the morning
light feet, folding neat her mourning
clothes, sunlight
flickers through the window, swelling
with strange joy of queen bee's dwelling-
the skylight
strokes her skin with sepia gunny
paints her dark-rimmed eyes with honey-
no floodlights
can dim her firm hands to move past
her grief & hold laughter to last-
the firelight
grows despite each stormy night, sure
as stern clock, she waits by the moor
with starlights
~~~~~
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moonlighting
i pull the curtains aside to
witness the glorious light, you brew
the moondust
over the bubbling sky, darkness
is poised, letting us string stillness
in moonbeams
under yellow maple trees, we
write poems, sip our tea and plea
with moonsongs
let the grey clouds wander & slip
let the lake waters rise & dip
the moonstones
shine our faces bright, stark blue
touch our feet with stars, we flew
with mooneyes
Posted for dVerse Poets Pub - Poetry Form: Compound Word Verse. This is a 15 line poem with the verse (aab rhyming scheme and 8-8-3 meter). See the example here. Thanks for the visit and comments.
I love both your examples... the first one we seems to have been on similar tracks of recovery from sorrow. The last stanza made me think of Wuthering Heights...
ReplyDeleteI love lighthouses, and the first poem really captures some of their most endearing and unusual attributes. I love the moon poem too - a subject which provides endless inspiration!
ReplyDeleteA lovely flowing narrative I thoroughly enjoyed being carried along with, Grace. Though I especially enjoyed your Moonlighting poem :-)
ReplyDeleteI agree; "flowing narrative " is the perfect way to describe it.
DeleteA beautiful flow, with profound sorrow running through the lighthouse poem Really well done.
ReplyDeleteA beautiful flow, with profound sorrow running through the lighthouse poem Really well done.
ReplyDeleteMy comment just got eaten! Trying again--I particularly like the first one, which does seem constrained by the form at all. It really flows. I love the title, too, and how you worked it in.
ReplyDeleteThis was lovely, it felt silky smooth.
ReplyDeleteTwo great examples of the requested form! Well done.
ReplyDeleteThey are both excellent Grace! This proved to be a fun prompt, thank you — and just enough to think through that it was interesting.
ReplyDeleteyou make it look so easy! This was harder than I thought, but so much fun. Love the flow and wordplay of both poems. 💓
ReplyDeleteyour words flow eloquently, I like both equally ... the set very different moods. Thanks for introducing me to this new format, it was indeed fun
ReplyDeleteI enjoyed how you connected the stanzas in the first poem.
ReplyDeleteGrace,
ReplyDeleteThese are so beautifully formed, the depth of feeling powerfully conveyed in each line. A ravishing read.
pax,
dora
Luv moon poem so the second is my favourite
ReplyDeleteAbsolutly luv this phrase
"you brew the moondust"
Much💜love
I really enjoyed both, especially the lighthouse. There is something quite magical about them - even their shape is unusual. Now I cannot get her image out of my head.
ReplyDeleteThis is what I mean! The first form does just flow, the form feels very organic and natural. It takes me a few goes to get to that point with a form. Once there, you can just flow with it - I love that. It's very tender.
ReplyDeleteBoth are beautiful, Grace but I am slightly partial to the moon one.
ReplyDeleteGrace, I especially like the way you ran the title into the poem. Beautiful work and thank you greatly for the prompt.
ReplyDeleteHow beautiful, both of these, each stanza flowing into the next.
ReplyDeleteI especially like the way the lines flow together in the first one. You don't even notice the rhymes.
ReplyDeleteThere's a lovely mood delicately but richly conveyed in both these poems. You make the form sing in both, but I especially like the flow and variety of expressions in the first.
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