Big Room, 1948, by Andrew Wyeth
i remembered how you were last summer,
green skirt hued with red plump strawberries,
your brown eyes like wine, full of promise
in this big room, the clock had ticked slowly
like waltz on fire-wood, slow burning, clinging,
rattling the stoic windows into river storm
we thought we are special breed,
black and white pods against the world,
above the bust and din of prying eyes,
prickling our skin with doubts, until our candles waned
dying slowly in this airless room,
sepia-washed, strained of seeds and flesh
i burn your words in the urn, black as
dry leaves gather, waiting for the winter wind
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Amazing wordplay !!!
ReplyDeleteis special and reminder me my own doubts!
ReplyDeleteNostalgic piece, vivid and beautifully penned, Grace. I especially like the first stanza.
ReplyDeleteMmm...interesting 'airless' quality you focussed on - perhaps due to lack of colour?
ReplyDeleteUndercurrent of sadness and despair here leave me with wanting to know more.
ReplyDeleteThe play on colors in the poem is intriguing against the bleached look of the painting. I like it.
ReplyDeletebeautifully done!
ReplyDeleteGorgeous! I saw this room in much the same way. Love how you have written it.
ReplyDeleteFor an empty room, Wyeth surely painted some thoughtful ideas, didn't he? I love how the sun reminded the writer of summer here, and how love used to be. Your words in later stanzas, bring in the chill of the winter snows, Heaven. A beautiful composition. Thank you for sharing. =D
ReplyDeletenice images in the poem, Heaven!
ReplyDeletesuperb G!
ReplyDeleteI love the image of the waltz on fire wood. Sad ending though. I guess the room being empty leaves us feeling that emptiness too maybe?
ReplyDeletewe thought we were different but....that caught me right there as i think we all find ourselves there at some point...that last stanza ...the burning , waiting on the wind is so emotive as well....really nice grace...
ReplyDeletethanks for your comment, this was my first and last, i am NOT a writer, but you certainly are. it's beautiful.
ReplyDeleteA poem that lingers on your mind long after you have read the last line...beautiful.
ReplyDeleteloved it all but esp the sepia washed..perfect for the picture..x
ReplyDeleteI really liked this
ReplyDeleteLike a grandfather clock at midnight, in an empty house.
It haunts
Rick
It never ceases to amaze me how one image can evoke so many different views-
ReplyDeleteI especially like the last four lines.
Really lovely...makes me yearn all the more for autumn...
ReplyDeleteWaltz on firewood ! very cool!
ReplyDeletewell done...thanks for sharing your words
ReplyDeleteA piece, Grace. Happy Sunday :)
ReplyDeleteLamenting and remembering the emptiness of missing someone dear! It can be quite testing. But it isn't that bad as it's just from last summer to the next winter. But still...! Nice write, Grace!
ReplyDeleteHank
Aw. . . dying from airlessness, as if hiding away in a retreat zapped the color from the possibilities. Do send those ashes off on the winter wind, and open the windows with your smile.
ReplyDeleteLovely
ReplyDeleteReflective and poignant - the sadness of lost love.
ReplyDeleteVery evocative - adding life and love to the image, and then bringing us back to the sad reality at the end. I enjoyed the first verse especially - the best side of memory.
ReplyDeleteI love the images that flash through my mind when reading this.
ReplyDeleteThis very eloquent Grace, it does seem like an autumn airlock, soon the reaper will reappear over there , eh? And you can all breathe a sigh of relief, thanks
ReplyDelete.. so much lovely imagery!
ReplyDeleteTinged with sepia, sadness and possibly regret. Like the memories of last summer and the unfulfilled promise. Lovely!
ReplyDeleteYou really take your reader on a journey here. So well done.
ReplyDelete=)
Such lovely images carry me away!
ReplyDeleteSummer has turned to winter...
ReplyDeleteBeautiful, beautiful wordplay.
ReplyDeleteAnna :o]
The emotions are movingly conjured. Well done.
ReplyDeleteThis is just spectacular, Grace. My take was about death also, and I wonder how many saw it that way (am just beginning to read others now).
ReplyDeletedying slowly in this airless room, = what a line.
Beautiful imagery here Grace....love this! :-)
ReplyDeleteoh lovely!
ReplyDeleteI burn your words ... and waiting for the winter wind
ReplyDeletevery strong images. I love the feel of crisp coldness on my cheeks - it makes me feel so alive and refreshed. I guess that is what this person longs for too.
like waltz on fire-wood, slow burning, clinging,.....beautiful, really beautiful! Well done.
ReplyDeleteWhat a beautiful piece of work.....
ReplyDeleteshades of roses on my walls
Oh this is so pretty. Funny how so many people thought of time when seeing the picture... I just thought of autumn, and evening. I see you might have thought of autumn too? Love the wordplay. My favorite stanza was:
ReplyDelete"in this big room, the clock had ticked slowly
like waltz on fire-wood, slow burning, clinging,
rattling the stoic windows into river storm"
I could see two people made of fire waltzing on fire-wood. Pretty amazing!
Lovely work! Well done =)
Oh and here's what I wrote, in case you're interested.
ReplyDeletehttp://diamondsmadeofglass.blogspot.fi/2012/09/dusk.html
PS. This poem was really sad to me. I loved the contrast of the colorful skirt and the sepia-washed picture. Really does miracles do the imagery in this.