Saturday, August 10, 2013

Of red plums



sky turns into blue lake
summer of August

we pick plums as
red ripening 
sweet nectar skin
and wrap its seeds
with brown paper

sunflowers blossom
yellow & orange spirals
wildflowers purple wave
    into
    

    r a i n d r o p s 

     
    into
waves, purple wildflowers 
spirals, orange & yellow
blossoms, sunflowers

paper (so) brown with 
seeds, we unwrap its 
skin, nectar sweet
ripening red
as plums we picked

August, that summer
lake turned bluer than sky-




Posted for Imaginary Garden of Real Toads - Sunday Challenge is Palindromes or Mirrored Poems

picture credit:   Tumblr.com

43 comments:

  1. Very cool, cooler, coolest. You almost made me forget it was palindrome!

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    1. Thanks Susan ~ Looking forward to yours ~

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    2. Yours gave me courage to "go all the way"!

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  2. Exquisite. If I hadn't known it was a palindrome, I might have read it through without being consciously aware of the excellence of technique, rather being lost in the wonderful sensory images that your work is known for. Really well done.

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    1. Thank you Kerry ~ I think we can allow for creativity so the meaning is not lost in the forward/backward jumble of words ~

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  3. Wow, Grace, this is very impressive. It takes a truly gifted poet to accomplish this. Perfection.

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    1. Thank you Mary ~ I always wanted to write (another) palindrome ~

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  4. Aha, you slightly twisted the palindrome - whew, that gives permission to swoop and curve a bit.

    I especially like this:

    paper (so) brown with
    seeds, we unwrap its
    skin

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    1. This is a tough challenge so I give you permission to change it up a bit ~

      The line palindrome though might be easier for some ~ Thanks M ~

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  5. :) beautiful. I really loved the way you started the journey with a plum and ended it again in a plum but the meanings were different. One showed harvesting and another sowing:)

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  6. Love what you did with this . . . a tale of two halves.

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  7. ha. really cool grace...nice progression in this...all centering on the raindrop...only a few little modifications to get it to go forward and back...this is not easy...i remember doing it at dverse...by the line for me was easier than the whole thing...i rather like the brown paper section myself....

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    1. Thank you Brian ~ Had to be a little creative so it makes sense ~

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  8. Wow, you did this flawlessly, kiddo! Absolutely wonderful! Like Kerry, the fact it is a palindrome took second place to the perfection of the poem itself. Bravo!Really impressive work.

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  9. Magnificent warmth... it feels alive and like a ripe fruit !

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  10. This is a difficult challange and you did very well! Now that I see it is possible for other toads I will give it a try! Thanks for this interesting prompt!

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  11. Forward and back, nicely done at your shack

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  12. Oh, boy!!! This is such an excellent example!! You've given me courage to want to try this again in a new way...love the slight variations that you used to tweak the second half and I love the shape that your center took. Wow. Greatness, Heaven!

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  13. O what a magical painting you paint. Especially love the opening scenario of sky becoming blue lake - like a distance shot - and then there's the zoom detail and finally returning to the distance panorama of blue sky and lake.

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  14. so tasty, Grace...yam excellent!

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  15. Amazing! I'm a tad dizzy from the back and forth and forth and back ..

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  16. Brilliant... It's amazing how it turns into to different poems altogether.

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  17. This is so well done. Lovely images to begin with and the form amplifies them. K.

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  18. the description is wonderful... loved the picture too

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  19. i'd say you've got the hang on the palindrome, Grace, this is so evocative and wonderful. your last line is just fantastic. and plums? yowza. love the photo as well.

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  20. Sensuous and gorgeous ... emotive ... you're so good at that, Grace, evoking all the senses. Thanks for the challenge ... it pushed me to try something new :)

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  21. gorgeous poem grace, reminds me of a red wheelbarrow - a simple, profound grace in an ordinary joy.

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  22. very nice love the turn on raindrops!

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  23. Deliciously fabulous poem fabulously delicious.
    And the photo you found has me craving red plums.
    K

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  24. PS
    I just scrolled back up to the top. Something clicked and said "Hey, that photo looks familiar!" Beautiful BC.
    K

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  25. The palindrome, I had heard of them never tried one that I know of but I certainly liked the style and the way you used raindrops to turn the mirror around. Now i want a ripe plum! or a grilled cheese sandwich. I think I just broke my mirror Grace!

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  26. I can feel the juice running down my chin.

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  27. I really like the tone and sensory imagery. You'll see why you reminded me of this:

    http://aholisticjourney.wordpress.com/2013/07/08/rain-story/

    =)

    Nice job!

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  28. words so beautiful, I can taste them! love palindromes....lovely image too :smiles

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  29. Wonderful Grace! You make me want to try again :D
    I love this prompt and your approach!

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  30. Wonderful... the palindrome has confused me...
    writing one seemed so daunting. As I read yours,
    and others, I think if I could just have spurt of
    creativity, something that strikes my fancy, I might be able to write one. At least give it a try.

    Thanks for sharing. I do agree with the others,
    as I read, it was a well written poem, not an exercise in a palindrome.
    Peace
    Siggi

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