sky turns into blue lake
summer of August
we pick plums as
red ripening
sweet nectar skin
and wrap its seeds
with brown paper
sunflowers blossom
yellow & orange spirals
wildflowers purple wave
into
r a i n d r o p s
into
waves, purple wildflowers
spirals, orange & yellow
blossoms, sunflowers
paper (so) brown with
seeds, we unwrap its
skin, nectar sweet
ripening red
as plums we picked
August, that summer
lake turned bluer than sky-
Posted for Imaginary Garden of Real Toads - Sunday Challenge is Palindromes or Mirrored Poems
picture credit: Tumblr.com
Very cool, cooler, coolest. You almost made me forget it was palindrome!
ReplyDeleteThanks Susan ~ Looking forward to yours ~
DeleteYours gave me courage to "go all the way"!
DeleteExquisite. If I hadn't known it was a palindrome, I might have read it through without being consciously aware of the excellence of technique, rather being lost in the wonderful sensory images that your work is known for. Really well done.
ReplyDeleteThank you Kerry ~ I think we can allow for creativity so the meaning is not lost in the forward/backward jumble of words ~
DeleteWow, Grace, this is very impressive. It takes a truly gifted poet to accomplish this. Perfection.
ReplyDeleteThank you Mary ~ I always wanted to write (another) palindrome ~
DeleteAha, you slightly twisted the palindrome - whew, that gives permission to swoop and curve a bit.
ReplyDeleteI especially like this:
paper (so) brown with
seeds, we unwrap its
skin
This is a tough challenge so I give you permission to change it up a bit ~
DeleteThe line palindrome though might be easier for some ~ Thanks M ~
ReplyDelete:) beautiful. I really loved the way you started the journey with a plum and ended it again in a plum but the meanings were different. One showed harvesting and another sowing:)
Thank you Vandana ~
DeleteLove what you did with this . . . a tale of two halves.
ReplyDeleteThank you, like a mirror ~
Deleteha. really cool grace...nice progression in this...all centering on the raindrop...only a few little modifications to get it to go forward and back...this is not easy...i remember doing it at dverse...by the line for me was easier than the whole thing...i rather like the brown paper section myself....
ReplyDeleteThank you Brian ~ Had to be a little creative so it makes sense ~
DeleteSo beautiful Grace...
ReplyDeleteThank you Susie ~
DeleteWow, you did this flawlessly, kiddo! Absolutely wonderful! Like Kerry, the fact it is a palindrome took second place to the perfection of the poem itself. Bravo!Really impressive work.
ReplyDeleteMagnificent warmth... it feels alive and like a ripe fruit !
ReplyDeleteThis is a difficult challange and you did very well! Now that I see it is possible for other toads I will give it a try! Thanks for this interesting prompt!
ReplyDeleteForward and back, nicely done at your shack
ReplyDeleteOh, boy!!! This is such an excellent example!! You've given me courage to want to try this again in a new way...love the slight variations that you used to tweak the second half and I love the shape that your center took. Wow. Greatness, Heaven!
ReplyDeleteLove this and I love red plums!
ReplyDeleteO what a magical painting you paint. Especially love the opening scenario of sky becoming blue lake - like a distance shot - and then there's the zoom detail and finally returning to the distance panorama of blue sky and lake.
ReplyDeleteso tasty, Grace...yam excellent!
ReplyDeleteAmazing! I'm a tad dizzy from the back and forth and forth and back ..
ReplyDeleteBrilliant... It's amazing how it turns into to different poems altogether.
ReplyDeleteThis is so well done. Lovely images to begin with and the form amplifies them. K.
ReplyDeletethe description is wonderful... loved the picture too
ReplyDeletei'd say you've got the hang on the palindrome, Grace, this is so evocative and wonderful. your last line is just fantastic. and plums? yowza. love the photo as well.
ReplyDeletegorgeous poem grace, reminds me of a red wheelbarrow - a simple, profound grace in an ordinary joy.
ReplyDeletevery nice love the turn on raindrops!
ReplyDeleteTruly awesome and beautiful!
ReplyDeleteDeliciously fabulous poem fabulously delicious.
ReplyDeleteAnd the photo you found has me craving red plums.
K
PS
ReplyDeleteI just scrolled back up to the top. Something clicked and said "Hey, that photo looks familiar!" Beautiful BC.
K
Wonderful, so descriptive.
ReplyDeleteThe palindrome, I had heard of them never tried one that I know of but I certainly liked the style and the way you used raindrops to turn the mirror around. Now i want a ripe plum! or a grilled cheese sandwich. I think I just broke my mirror Grace!
ReplyDeleteI can feel the juice running down my chin.
ReplyDeleteI really like the tone and sensory imagery. You'll see why you reminded me of this:
ReplyDeletehttp://aholisticjourney.wordpress.com/2013/07/08/rain-story/
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Nice job!
words so beautiful, I can taste them! love palindromes....lovely image too :smiles
ReplyDeleteWonderful Grace! You make me want to try again :D
ReplyDeleteI love this prompt and your approach!
Wonderful... the palindrome has confused me...
ReplyDeletewriting one seemed so daunting. As I read yours,
and others, I think if I could just have spurt of
creativity, something that strikes my fancy, I might be able to write one. At least give it a try.
Thanks for sharing. I do agree with the others,
as I read, it was a well written poem, not an exercise in a palindrome.
Peace
Siggi
I love the sunflowers...I always love sunflowers.
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