I lean into the summer light
With a whiff of yesterday's song
Heat was sweltering, our palms sweaty
Figuring out where's the exit, under all the confetti
Confetti strips on my lashes,
Lashes wet from rain, weight of blues
Blues polished under the silver moon
Moon is grand but a stoic muse
I gave him nothing to reel & relish
All our memories crashed in the hard drive - perished
All my poems tossed in the black sand
We figured out that peace comes with heavy strands
Strands of shadows & rough greys
Greys in rainbows after the quick storms
Storm of hail lulls, with the burst of afternoon sun
Sunroom, where it all started like a dream
We now wander in circles, ever widening
Our calendars out of sync, tides are running
In a knot of missed hitches, time is a loop
You and I mirror, yesterday in a swoop
Note: This is a variation of Loop Poetry. The other ones are:
I. Summertime in Ontario
Yesterday’s cold dusted in a blink
Blink, and the minute turns
Turns to long hour, my eyes
Eyes the clock, sun burns
Morning air is humid, crackles
Crackles turn to birdsongs
Birdsongs break the crisp hum, hush
Hush! where’s the rain, so far along
Evening paints a peach cooler time
Time is patient as sugar maple trees
Trees so vibrant green, summer is a toast
Toast to begonias, blue sky, buzzing bees!
II. Weekdays in a blur
Monday {yawns} opens the door to Tuesday
Tuesday rushes in, fluffs the pillows for Wednesday
Wednesday offers ice wine & hot gossip to Thursday
Thursday laps it all up, in cruise control, awaiting Friday
Friday is in a pink party mood, dancing until early Saturday
Saturday is in no hurry, lounging in pajamas until Sunday
Sunday is <lost>in book & clouds, forgetting time & Monday
Posted for dVerse Poets Pub - Loop Poetry. Join us when the pub doors open at 3pm EST and try your hand in loop poetry. There are 3 variations of loop poetry and I have shown all 3 here. Thanks for your visits and comments.
Variations:
1. Stanzas, writers choice on the number, no rhyming, the last word, first word scheme is maintained.
2. One long stanza, no limit on number of lines, no rhyming scheme, the last word, first word scheme is maintained.
3. Couplets mixed with 4 line stanzas, the last word, first word scheme is maintained in the stanzas. It can also be used in the couplets. Rhyme scheme is ab, cc, defg, hh, ii, jklm, nn, oo.
I LOVED the combination of the loop stanzas with refrains. A wonderful poem! And the calendar poem is a clever way to answer the prompt.
ReplyDeleteWow!!! what grand responses.
ReplyDeleteLuv the grey in rainbows, made me pause and ponder.
Thanks for dropping by to read mine
much💚love
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Wow, this is epic. I enjoyed the struggle with Type I, letting the loops form mysteriously, cruised through Type II (which is the form I chose), and chuckled at the clever twists in Type III. Very impressive, You ain't afraid of no loops.
ReplyDeleteAmbitious, successful, and wholly engaging. Excellent Grace! Each embodies a wonderful variation unto itself.
ReplyDeleteYou make each variation look so effortless! These are all so good, love how you used "blues" in the first poem! 💙
ReplyDeleteWhat wonderful examples for us to follow
ReplyDeleteFabulous loop assortment - what a treat to read them. Thank you Grace.
ReplyDeleteExcellent imagery! And you sustain the beauty to the end.
ReplyDeleteMoon is grand but a stoic muse
ReplyDeleteI gave him nothing to reel & relish
All our memories crashed in the hard drive - perished
All my poems tossed in the black sand
We figured out that peace comes with heavy strands
I didn't catch on to the first variation but lovely nonetheless. Days of the week are a natural for the 2nd variation.
ReplyDeleteWow, love these Grace, I'm really drawn to the first, something lost, yet something resolved?
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