Your perfume is black orchid of sadness
Enticing my shadows, rhapsody of madness
I shimmer into your quicksand of scars
Blood ink-stained verses drip, my hands are shears
wholly competing for your moon-starved eyes, I'm
falling over your reckless mountains & dunes of desire
Above, stars are pelting unicorn's lights
Sky is castle of doomsday chaos in our sighs
We hear our hearts beat as birds of prey
Circling in unison - magic - in the fray
Our mouths are filled with dead flowers
And tumbleweeds, caressing stolen hours
Love, let's lie together, stroked (stroking)
in our failing universe, ash-smoked (smoking)
Posted for dVerse Poets Pub - Exploring Gothic as a Literary Genre hosted by Sanaa Rizvi. Thanks for your visits and comments. This is our last Poetics for 2020 before we go to our Holiday break.
Beautiful poem!
ReplyDeleteSo beautiful and tragic. I love the gothic imageries you evoke and entwine, especially in this:
ReplyDelete"Enticing my shadows, rhapsody of madness
I shimmer into your quicksand of scars
Blood ink-stained verses drip, my hands are shears
wholly competing for your moon-starved eyes..."
I really, really loved this piece, Grace. Everything about it is mesmerizing; it haunting to read, especially when looking back at the madness and sadness lines. I think the theme here is something of "despite our darkness and madness, we have each other to absorb into." In that way, it can be consuming. A brilliantly penned piece. It truly is beautiful.
This is exquisitely drawn, Grace! Especially love; "We hear our hearts beat as birds of prey/Circling in unison - magic - in the fray. Our mouths are filled with dead flowers/And tumbleweeds, caressing stolen hours." Thank you so much for writing to the prompt!💝💝
ReplyDeleteThis is a wonderful poem. I love the imagery, and especially the sound and parentheses in the last two lines.
ReplyDeleteStunning, Grace! There is so much dark beauty in this poem. I especially love the phrases ‘rhapsody of madness’ and ‘quicksand of scars’.
ReplyDeleteThis is wonderful and dark, the imagery of this has a classic feel, and I can also see that you had fun writing it.
ReplyDeleteMy hands are shears made me thinking of poor Edvard Scissorhands and anything Tim Burton is gothic to me.
Those first 4 lines are out of this world! Truly mesmerizing, Grace.
ReplyDeleteThis is delightfully gothic with a modern twist. I love the sing-song of those final lines especially.
ReplyDeleteJust as prescribed, a dark write. Well penned.
ReplyDeleteSo many fine lines here, Grace. From the black orchid perfume opener to those smokin closers... Outstanding
ReplyDelete“Your perfume is black orchid of sadness”
ReplyDelete“quicksand of scars”
“moon-starved eyes”
“Our mouths are filled with dead flowers”
Wow. So good!
This is wonderful Grace, darkly delicious. “moon-starved eyes” love it!
ReplyDeleteOh, so wonderfully dark! Love this, Grace.
ReplyDeleteawesome gothic imagery of the mad, bad and sad ... your use of words is inspiring!
ReplyDeleteSo beautiful Grace.
ReplyDeleteThat black orchid perfume permeates the air as the reader slides further and further down into the abyss with these two dark lovers! Well-written and haunting! ✨
ReplyDeleteThis flow of disjointed images is like a nightmare, a narcotic dream, as they all flow in the same direction with the inevitable end. Good one!
ReplyDeleteAs Lucy said, tragic. But there is beauty in your closing couplet. Comfort in the darkness.
ReplyDeletePerfectly gothic!
ReplyDelete"Blood ink-stained verses drip, my hands are shears"
Love this writing, Grace!