Monday, May 18, 2020

summer nights



i taste the skin
from summer fruit
the juice sticky

on my lips  
as sliver of light
glaces the room

you are fixated:
crystals & mirrors

or is it
murmurings of trees 
you hear

pressing on
& on

i gulp down 
2 red pills




Posted for dVerse Poet Pub- Quadrille hosted by De Jackson.   This is a 44 word post, with the given word, FIX.  Thanks for your comments & visits.

23 comments:

  1. Oh I wonder about those red pills... it starts so nice, but I cannot cease to wonder what ugliness there are beneath.

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  2. This is strangely unsettling. Nice use of the prompt word - fixated has a real kick to it.

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  3. Oh, those last two lines were a surprise. Unsettling, in deed. Well done.

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  4. Those last couple of lines really are unsettling.

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  5. Hi Grace! It's lovely to see you back for the quadrille. Your poem appeals to all the senses and I love the sliver of light that glaces the room. What are those two red pills for?

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  6. The red pills at the end present the reader with a mystery perhaps something ominous, perhaps nothing at all.

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  7. if they are the red pills from the matrix film one is plenty. your words are fixating.

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  8. Murmuring of trees? Methinks it must've been hearing voices that drove you to the red pills!!

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  9. I love the first three lines (haiku?) I'm wondering about the fixation on crystals and mirrors and wonder if they are connected to the 2 red pills. Very compelling poem, Grace.

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  10. A very interesting juxtaposition of imagery.

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  11. Much to ponder here...the red pills and the fixation.

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  12. The edges of reality are beginning to blur...

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  13. i gulp down
    2 red pills

    Utterly despondent and one ends up gulping whatever that can help. Things are beginning to get out of control from governments to ordinary folks!

    Hank

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  14. I really like this mysterious piece. Well written.

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  15. gulping down unpleasant truth, I guess, it's better than the blue pill of ignorance.

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  16. I wonder at those 2 red pills
    Be safe

    Muchđź’™love

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  17. One could become 'fixated' on your poetry .... stay safe and healthy!

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  18. This is wonderful. Then tension between the beginning and the end is fantastic.

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  19. As others have stated, this is unsettling. Leaves me wondering.

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  20. I think this poem is the tip of a very intriguing story and I like that it did that for me. I saw someone caring for their spouse with alzheimers...but there are many possibilities.

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  21. Grace: Interesting! Love the choice of "fixated" which is an interesting tendency of mind.

    I wish I understood the last two lines about the red pill. I thought of two fun and related metaphors:
    (1) a pomegranate: red fruit (from your first stanza). A fruit posited by some religious traditions to be the forbidden fruit in Genesis.
    (2) the red pill in The Matrix (movie): which reveals unpleasant truth.

    See their connection?

    The poem jumping from "I" to "You" and back to "I" makes me see a scene with a couple (perhaps in this time of isolation) sitting in their living room, far too familiar with each other while one (the "I") is obsessed with physical/sensual sensations and she/he is criticizing the partner who is "fixated" or distracted by things far less real (crystals, unheard mumurings etc). And so to escape the oppressive relationship, the sensual spouse grabs her red psych pills, no the pills are not the two mentioned above).

    See what happens to the reader when there is little guidance and much vagueness. Smile. Now, reading through the comments, I see talk about the red pill but not the other things I mention -- my guess, they didn't wonder further -- too abstract. Must of been my morning coffee that kept me going. Have a good day.

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  22. Love the way I which you used, ‘fixated.’ Also, ‘as sliver of light glaces the room.’

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