The waters corral me, quicksand
I am slipping, and not a strand
Nor knot can lift me up, sorrow
Drowns me, beneath bed of yarrow
Then sky clears, danger pressed in cask
Darkness - just a rose with black mask
I toss away this blight, see dawn
Casting soft light, pale pink and fawn
Port Credit, Mississauga
Posted for dVerse Poets Pub - OpenLinkNight, hosted by Mish and Poetry Form, Quatrain, hosted by Frank Hubeny. Thanks for the visit.
Love how you painted all those colors of a dawn that bring such release...
ReplyDeleteLovely painting of dawn - a rose with a black mask.
ReplyDeleteIn simply 8 lines you were able to go from inconsolable dread to a shining new perspective on life. That takes skill. Nature is with us every step of the way. Thank goodness for dawn.
ReplyDeletelove how your wove in the colour fawn - the notion too of slipping as the sun rises
ReplyDeleteYou capture the feeling of drowning that sorrow brings, and sometimes, how dawn can bring a change of heart.
ReplyDeleteGrace this is so beautiful with it's sadness that is then lifted with the dawn.
ReplyDeleteThis is why I love being a morning person. A sunrise starts it off perfectly.
ReplyDeleteThis is incredibly evocative, Grace!💖 You portray the feeling of sorrow and how one manages to overcome it so well!
ReplyDeleteI toss away this blight, see dawn,
ReplyDeleteI love the image of darkness tossed.
Lovely picture of dawn.
Yes, things look better in the morning!
ReplyDeletePale pink and fawn...what a beautiful description of first light.
ReplyDeleteThe contrast you create is palpable and relatable. Sorrow and loss have so much power over us. Hope is such a relief.
ReplyDeleteI saw storm and then the calm that follows the storm. Lovely imagery in this!
ReplyDeleteA poignant awakening of the new day Grace, I especially love'Darkness - just a rose with black mask
ReplyDeleteI toss away this blight, see dawn
Casting soft light, pale pink and fawn'
Enjoy your Summer break xxx
First stanza is intense with the claustrophobic sense of drowning in sorrow; those dreams and states are so powerless, like a child unable and unknowing and abandoned. What a relief the second stanza, lifting one's head from the wet pillow to the light. That's the hope, at least, though grief is like having sex with an 800 pound gorilla: the fun is done when the ape says so.
ReplyDeleteBrendan, I must say I am intrigued by your point of reference. hehe. Still hope remains at the bottom of the box again. These openings are ubiquitous.. Pan-door-a
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Sigh. I could almost physically feel the sorrow and sadness of your first stanza, Grace. Counterbalance by closing stanza, of joy and relief of the coming dawn. Myself, I prefer the dusk, being a night owl.
ReplyDeleteI always enjoy reading your words. My favorite line of this poem is the last. "Casting soft light, pale pink and fawn" - This captures dawn for me.
ReplyDeleteI like how the dawn helps one rise from the bed of yarrow.
ReplyDeleteThis is such a beautiful dawn landscape, Grace. The quicksand metaphor is so evocative, as is the lovely use of colour.
ReplyDeleteLovely, Grace. “Pale pick and fawn.” Our sunset tonight almost matched the picture you chose. We didn’t want to go inside it was so beautiful.
ReplyDeleteOh Grace! This is you all over, and so wonderful. You taught me sumpin! ;)
ReplyDelete"Fawn" noun - baby deer, that I knew
Fawning as verb - to flatter excessively, not too nice...
But wait... I have never seen fawn as an adjective... is it a color or a description of a baby deer hiding... both of those informed the image in that masterstroke last line but the true meaning opens it all up WONDERFULLY
"FAWN" AS adj: joyfully, exultant, glad. it fits right in perfectly! and still evinces a quiet stillness. Also filled with the wisdom of the perspective that comes with the hope of a new morning. Thank you for this Grace.
I love the progression from sorrow to joy, from the dark of night to the light of morning. :-)
ReplyDelete~Imelda