she said what she had to say
unbiased truth,
traumatic thoughts of young
woman, preyed by puppet-master
now she is offered
freedom
if she can lie
again
glimpse of her future
shimmering rose, pixelating
on wintered pond
she said what she had to say
Posted for D'verse Poets Pub - Quadrille, hosted by Victoria ~ The word is shimmer, in 44 word count
First off, that photo is gorgeous!!! Can I please come into it and hide there forever?!
ReplyDeleteThe way you turned the meaning in that last line is pure genius.
Delete"glimpse of her future
shimmering rose, pixelating" ... This is a poem all by itself, for me.
The pictures from Colossal are pretty amazing and it's my get go of images ~
DeleteIt's a frozen pond though; I prefer hiding under a beach umbrella ~
Thanks dear ~
I prefer poolside, with no umbrella. I can't stand sand. It's so yucky!
DeleteThe thought of using the same ending line and beginning, and how the meaning has transformed... a future in a frozen pond... shudder... those truths are mighty swords of Damocles
ReplyDeleteWonderful, unique take on the prompt. I love this stanza:
ReplyDeleteglimpse of her future
shimmering rose, pixelating
on wintered pond
I agree, the photo is stunning.
ReplyDeleteHave to let out what you need some times and then say what you have to at others.
ReplyDeleteThe repeat of that line...with new emphasis changing meaning. Wonderful.
ReplyDeleteWhat an amazing photo...truly it is stunning. I just got through reading a news story of a young woman in the music business who was offered her release from a contract with a producer if she would retract her accusation of rape by him. My mind went to that sad story when I read this.
ReplyDeleteYes Gayle, she was in my mind, when I wrote this ~ Thanks~
DeleteI feel for her...great 44. Gorgeous photo, too.
ReplyDeleteI'm very moved by this
ReplyDeleteI love the last line echoing the first, and its emphasis.
ReplyDeleteLooking at that photo and reading the last line, I like to think that pixilated light is a rosy future for her, saying what she had to say regardless. If nothing else, freedom from oppression.
ReplyDeletereally amazing Grace !
ReplyDeletethis is packed with emotion
ReplyDeleteA disturbing predicament...when cold puppet-master walks away free too.
ReplyDeleteBeautiful poem, beautiful photo. Pretty words, yet an undertone of tragedy. Excellent.
ReplyDeleteon point. sharp; direct, impactful ~
ReplyDeleteI think I have approached this prompt from a similar angle, Grace. You know what they say - great minds and all that. I love that stanza:
ReplyDelete'glimpse of her future
shimmering rose, pixelating
on wintered pond'
:)
Indeed sometimes one says what they need to in order to escape a bad situation.
ReplyDeleteSame line, beginning and end, with only a font change to one word -- excellent. The use of the word is so beautiful coupled with the photo.
ReplyDeleteYou've captured in 44 words beauty and a truth of life for some.
Wonderfully done.
This poem is rich with meaning. Somehow, I am glad that the woman here has learned to survive and fight for her future.
ReplyDeleteDisturbing -- well penned. Complex
ReplyDeleteA tough price to pay for freedom. It amazes me how much story can reside in a 44 word poem.
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