There are three things she recalls -
the way he laughed with her, gentleness
of his hands & sunset unfolding in his eyes
Language is a dance of spoken
words and unspoken thoughts. It also nests
nuances, which seems to invite a kiss-
She knew he is a keeper
Sevenling (Travelling)
In the station, we check our list:
luggages, tickets and coins
for the subway musician playing a folksy song
There are different rules for the rich -
luxury yacht vacations, private plane lounges
and special tax treatment -
We travel via rustic train, smelling earth, tasting wind-
In the station, we check our list:
luggages, tickets and coins
for the subway musician playing a folksy song
There are different rules for the rich -
luxury yacht vacations, private plane lounges
and special tax treatment -
We travel via rustic train, smelling earth, tasting wind-
Posted for D'verse Poets Pub - Sevenling, hosted by De Jackson ~ Thanks for the visit ~
I am so deeply enamored of this line break, I cannot tell you:
ReplyDelete"Language is a dance of spoken"
Love both of these. "smelling earth, tasting wind" indeed. Delightful. Give me a poor man's journey, any day. :)
Sigh.. both sevenlings are so exquisitely dreamy :D :D
ReplyDeleteAh, there are different ways of traveling indeed....but the result of both is a change of scenery.
ReplyDeleteAnd I am willing to bet we are happier than those on the yachts!
ReplyDeleteI think I'd prefer the train travel, myself. I would hope that whatever means of travel you take, that it would be special when your love is along for the ride. :)
ReplyDeleteI adore this line: "the way he laughed with her gentleness" ... and the artwork that goes with it.
ReplyDeleteAlso this: "We travel via rustic train, smelling earth, tasting wind" ... I hate trains, but I love wind.
Both of these are distinctly beautiful, Grace. (line 5 of first...should it be "nests" ?)
ReplyDeleteI love the sweetness of her observations during that first meeting and somehow the less extravagant way of travel seems perhaps more relaxed and fun. Enjoyed both of these, Grace.
ReplyDeleteI love the line "Language is a dance of spoken words and unspoken thoughts." How much of our communication to one another is without words?
ReplyDeleteTim
Love the tactile sensations of both poems. The 2nd one is especially earthy. Well-written.
ReplyDeleteOh I love the language spoken in dance. Yes that's love. Somehow I pity the rich and what they miss in their plastic travel.
ReplyDeleteI love both Sevenlings ;)
ReplyDelete"sunselt unfolding in his eyes"....now that is love. Both of these, though very different, are wonderful. Yes, I love the language line too....and I love the juxtaposition of the types of travel. Gloria Steinem, in her latest book, includes a section about the advantage of driving with a taxi driver in NY City....she chats with them and learns about the folks of the city. Seems to me the train does the same. :)
ReplyDeleteI, too, prefer engaging myself to crowd when traveling, Grace. It makes me feel human having to share laughter with people I just met or I will meet along the way. Life is cool if we can do things in a more convenient way/s, but to achieve something or be able to do something in a hard way is much more fulfilling & rewarding indeed. :)
ReplyDeleteReally beautifully written.
ReplyDeleteBoth of these are lovely. Love the "sunset unfolding in his eyes"
ReplyDeleteI wish I had the train rides and also the special tax treatment ;)
ReplyDeleteCan travel through many different ways indeed
ReplyDeleteLove them both but especially the second. I'd rather travel by train.
ReplyDeleteAnna :o]
Kudos for both, terrific wordsmithing all around. I kind of like the second one best; last line is killer. I think you eclipsed the title restriction on the form, but a small niche in the shininess & whimsey.
ReplyDeleteThis a lovely dance of words and I will try follow, friend Grace ... Love, cat.
ReplyDeleteBoth lovely – and I think they would work well enough with opening phrases in titles.
ReplyDeletea gentleness to the first, and a bit of bite to the second - both strong, Grace. Hope you are well ~
ReplyDeleteI really love the tenderness and sensuality in your first sevenling. My heart melts :-) "We travel via rustic train, smelling earth, tasting wind-" I would much prefer this mode of travel over the other. Again, well said ,,,,
ReplyDeleteI will kiss you with language and leave the yachts and the oceans speak to each other.
ReplyDeleteBe Well Grace
You're so good. How poetic.
ReplyDeleteI really love the second one. It feels like preparation to simple adventure.
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