Saturday, June 8, 2013

Nightwatch

we climb out of our cars, straining 
to see the last harvest of full moon. 
The trees are silent as we're counting

each grain weaving across the dark sky-
each light sliding, skating the lagoon-
each verse stitching like a neat bow tie-

lustrous is canvas unveiling, awed 
are we to witness this feat: scooped,  swooned,
lifted like a gem - a night unflawed !



 


 Posted for Imaginary Garden with Real Toads - Nocturna poem and theme - I am hosting this mini-challenge this weekend.

 Poetry form:  This is a 9 line poem (3 tercets) linked by the rhyme of the centre line. I have kept the 9 syllables per line (instead of 10) and have followed the rhyme scheme:  a. b. a. c. b. c. d. b. d.

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36 comments:

  1. Pat HattJune 8, 2013 at 10:08 AM

    Great pic and as you say, would sure leave one in awe with such a display, happy saturday

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  2. Brian MillerJune 8, 2013 at 11:25 AM

    counting each grain weaving across the night sky...what a cool line that is!!!! i love the night and your imagery is amazing....very cool grace...was right there...in awe. smiles.

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  3. Gloria BakerJune 8, 2013 at 12:02 PM

    Just lovely Grace!!

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  4. MaryJune 8, 2013 at 12:34 PM

    So beautiful, Grace. To witness a full moon on a clear night really awes! I like 'lifted like a gem - a night unflawed.'

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  5. MarianJune 8, 2013 at 1:17 PM

    nice! looks like a fun form, thank you for introducing it, Grace.

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  6. Vandana SharmaJune 8, 2013 at 1:31 PM

    beautiful description and reading it at night, just leaves you in its awe....

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  7. Maggie GraceJune 8, 2013 at 1:34 PM

    This is so beautiful! I can't do the preferred form so am in awe of your form as much as your poetry!

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  8. grapelingJune 8, 2013 at 2:04 PM

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  9. grapelingJune 8, 2013 at 2:05 PM

    a night unflawed! yours is a luminous nocturna.

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  10. Kerry O'ConnorJune 8, 2013 at 2:06 PM

    Very beautiful in form, content and style. The picture is the perfect compliment to your post.

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  11. HannahJune 8, 2013 at 3:41 PM

    "lustrous is canvas unveiling, awed"
    my favorite line, I think but I know there are many in close tie...wow and I agree with, Kerry, perfect picture for this!! Excellent and thank you for hosting this challenge!! :)

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  12. HelenJune 8, 2013 at 6:07 PM

    ... 'a night unflawed' ~ a poem unflawed.

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  13. UnknownJune 8, 2013 at 6:47 PM

    I agree wit hHelen ... unflawed = perfection!!

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  14. J Cosmo NewberyJune 8, 2013 at 9:20 PM

    Lovely imagery.

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  15. Kay L. DaviesJune 9, 2013 at 1:25 AM

    Oh, so beautiful, Grace. I agree with Helen and Sam. Unflawed indeed.
    I sure enjoyed writing mine, with a photo from our last holiday, and postable to a camera meme as well. Bonus!
    I think I could learn to enjoy the Nocturna.
    K

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  16. CharleenJune 9, 2013 at 7:52 AM

    Beautiful.

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  17. Abin ChakrabortyJune 9, 2013 at 11:21 AM

    life seems truly beautiful in these splendid moments.

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  18. SusanJune 9, 2013 at 11:32 AM

    Your images open my heart! What an ode to night! Thank you. Skating Lights!

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  19. anthonynorthJune 9, 2013 at 12:03 PM

    Such a beautiful scene you paint with your words.

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  20. DEZMONDJune 9, 2013 at 12:47 PM

    the last harvest of full moon..... swoon :)

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  21. Sherry Blue SkyJune 9, 2013 at 2:21 PM

    Very lovely nocturna, and it goes perfectly with the photo.

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  22. NatašekJune 9, 2013 at 3:21 PM

    hmm.. love the imagery, it flows nicely. and I agree, goes nicely with the photo.

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  23. parentforward.blogspot.comJune 9, 2013 at 4:37 PM

    I really like the line
    "the trees are silent as we are counting"
    beautiful.

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  24. nanJune 9, 2013 at 5:47 PM

    ethereal and lovely. I especially like the second stanza.

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  25. Tom PescatoreJune 9, 2013 at 9:11 PM

    really diggin' this

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  26. UnknownJune 9, 2013 at 9:50 PM

    Very peaceful. It takes me there.

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  27. MargaretJune 9, 2013 at 10:59 PM

    A harvest, a lagoon, a canvas!! This poem has it all. A marriage of imagination and words!!

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  28. Susie ClevengerJune 10, 2013 at 2:42 AM

    This is so serene..The moon has such attraction to all of us. This so beautifully speaks of that attraction.

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  29. TALONJune 10, 2013 at 9:20 AM

    Oh, this was so lovely. I felt like I was gazing up and taking it in right along side you. Just gorgeous (I'm partial to the moon). :)

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  30. TCPCJune 10, 2013 at 10:27 AM

    Ah! picture perfect this is. very scenic drinking in the beauty of the moonlit night!

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  31. the walking manJune 10, 2013 at 11:11 AM

    And in following you own scheme you did honor to the moon and those that look up long enough to witness her ever watching strength.

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  32. LolamouseJune 10, 2013 at 2:31 PM

    This is so beautiful! I absolutely LOVE the closing line!

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  33. Amrit SinhaJune 10, 2013 at 3:03 PM

    Wonderful imagery !!!

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  34. Tom PescatoreJune 11, 2013 at 1:05 AM

    nice to meet you too grace!

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  35. Preeti S.June 11, 2013 at 10:36 AM

    Brilliant imagery. Loved it.

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  36. AnonymousJune 16, 2013 at 6:41 AM

    I really enjoyed the photo, it is a very large photo of the full moon which adds to the poem. I like the image of the light skating over the lagoon. There is really a feeling that everything is in place and everything is exactly where it should be when reading this poem.

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