Thursday, July 28, 2022

Time in a Loop

 I lean into the summer light

With a whiff of yesterday's song


Heat was sweltering, our palms sweaty 

Figuring out where's the exit, under all the confetti


Confetti strips on my lashes, 

Lashes wet from rain, weight of blues

Blues polished under the silver moon

Moon is grand but a stoic muse


I gave him nothing to reel & relish

All our memories crashed in the hard drive - perished


All my poems tossed in the black sand

We figured out that peace comes with heavy strands


Strands of shadows & rough greys

Greys in rainbows after the quick storms

Storm of hail lulls, with the burst of afternoon sun 

Sunroom, where it all started like a dream


We now wander in circles, ever widening

Our calendars out of sync, tides are running


In a knot of missed hitches, time is a loop 

You and I mirror, yesterday in a swoop


Note:  This is a variation of Loop Poetry.  The other ones are:

I.   Summertime in Ontario


Yesterday’s cold dusted in a blink

Blink, and the minute turns

Turns to long hour, my eyes

Eyes the clock, sun burns


Morning air is humid, crackles

Crackles turn to birdsongs

Birdsongs break the crisp hum, hush

Hush! where’s the rain, so far along


Evening paints a peach cooler time

Time is patient as sugar maple trees

Trees so vibrant green, summer is a toast

Toast to begonias, blue sky, buzzing bees!



II.  Weekdays in a blur


Monday {yawns} opens the door to Tuesday

Tuesday rushes in, fluffs the pillows for Wednesday

Wednesday offers ice wine & hot gossip to Thursday

Thursday laps it all up, in cruise control, awaiting Friday

Friday is in a pink party mood, dancing until early Saturday

Saturday is in no hurry, lounging in pajamas until Sunday

Sunday is <lost>in book & clouds, forgetting time & Monday



Posted for dVerse Poets Pub - Loop Poetry.   Join us when the pub doors open at 3pm EST and try your hand in loop poetry.  There are 3 variations of loop poetry and I have shown all 3 here.  Thanks for your visits and comments.   

Variations:

1. Stanzas, writers choice on the number, no rhyming, the last word, first word scheme is maintained.

2. One long stanza, no limit on number of lines, no rhyming scheme, the last word, first word scheme is maintained.

3. Couplets mixed with 4 line stanzas, the last word, first word scheme is maintained in the stanzas. It can also be used in the couplets. Rhyme scheme is ab, cc, defg, hh, ii, jklm, nn, oo.


12 comments:

  1. I LOVED the combination of the loop stanzas with refrains. A wonderful poem! And the calendar poem is a clever way to answer the prompt.

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  2. Wow!!! what grand responses.
    Luv the grey in rainbows, made me pause and ponder.

    Thanks for dropping by to read mine
    much💚love

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  3. Wow, this is epic. I enjoyed the struggle with Type I, letting the loops form mysteriously, cruised through Type II (which is the form I chose), and chuckled at the clever twists in Type III. Very impressive, You ain't afraid of no loops.

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  4. Ambitious, successful, and wholly engaging. Excellent Grace! Each embodies a wonderful variation unto itself.

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  5. You make each variation look so effortless! These are all so good, love how you used "blues" in the first poem! 💙

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  6. What wonderful examples for us to follow

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  7. Fabulous loop assortment - what a treat to read them. Thank you Grace.

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  8. Excellent imagery! And you sustain the beauty to the end.

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  9. Moon is grand but a stoic muse
    I gave him nothing to reel & relish
    All our memories crashed in the hard drive - perished
    All my poems tossed in the black sand
    We figured out that peace comes with heavy strands

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  10. I didn't catch on to the first variation but lovely nonetheless. Days of the week are a natural for the 2nd variation.

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  11. Wow, love these Grace, I'm really drawn to the first, something lost, yet something resolved?

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