Thursday, April 7, 2016

Two Sevenling poems

Sevenling (First meeting)


There are three things she recalls - 
the way he laughed with her,  gentleness
of his hands & sunset unfolding in his eyes

Language is a dance of spoken
words and unspoken thoughts.  It also nests
nuances, which seems to invite a kiss-

She knew he is a keeper






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Sevenling (Travelling) 



In the station, we check our list:  
luggages, tickets and coins
for the subway musician playing a folksy song

There are different rules for the rich -
luxury yacht vacations, private plane lounges 
and special tax treatment -

We travel via rustic train, smelling earth, tasting wind-




Posted for D'verse Poets Pub - Sevenling, hosted by De Jackson ~  Thanks for the visit ~

27 comments:

  1. I am so deeply enamored of this line break, I cannot tell you:
    "Language is a dance of spoken"

    Love both of these. "smelling earth, tasting wind" indeed. Delightful. Give me a poor man's journey, any day. :)

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  2. Sigh.. both sevenlings are so exquisitely dreamy :D :D

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  3. Ah, there are different ways of traveling indeed....but the result of both is a change of scenery.

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  4. And I am willing to bet we are happier than those on the yachts!

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  5. I think I'd prefer the train travel, myself. I would hope that whatever means of travel you take, that it would be special when your love is along for the ride. :)

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  6. I adore this line: "the way he laughed with her gentleness" ... and the artwork that goes with it.

    Also this: "We travel via rustic train, smelling earth, tasting wind" ... I hate trains, but I love wind.

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  7. Both of these are distinctly beautiful, Grace. (line 5 of first...should it be "nests" ?)

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  8. I love the sweetness of her observations during that first meeting and somehow the less extravagant way of travel seems perhaps more relaxed and fun. Enjoyed both of these, Grace.

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  9. I love the line "Language is a dance of spoken words and unspoken thoughts." How much of our communication to one another is without words?

    Tim

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  10. Love the tactile sensations of both poems. The 2nd one is especially earthy. Well-written.

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  11. Oh I love the language spoken in dance. Yes that's love. Somehow I pity the rich and what they miss in their plastic travel.

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  12. "sunselt unfolding in his eyes"....now that is love. Both of these, though very different, are wonderful. Yes, I love the language line too....and I love the juxtaposition of the types of travel. Gloria Steinem, in her latest book, includes a section about the advantage of driving with a taxi driver in NY City....she chats with them and learns about the folks of the city. Seems to me the train does the same. :)

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  13. I, too, prefer engaging myself to crowd when traveling, Grace. It makes me feel human having to share laughter with people I just met or I will meet along the way. Life is cool if we can do things in a more convenient way/s, but to achieve something or be able to do something in a hard way is much more fulfilling & rewarding indeed. :)

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  14. Both of these are lovely. Love the "sunset unfolding in his eyes"

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  15. I wish I had the train rides and also the special tax treatment ;)

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  16. Can travel through many different ways indeed

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  17. Love them both but especially the second. I'd rather travel by train.
    Anna :o]

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  18. Kudos for both, terrific wordsmithing all around. I kind of like the second one best; last line is killer. I think you eclipsed the title restriction on the form, but a small niche in the shininess & whimsey.

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  19. This a lovely dance of words and I will try follow, friend Grace ... Love, cat.

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  20. Both lovely – and I think they would work well enough with opening phrases in titles.

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  21. a gentleness to the first, and a bit of bite to the second - both strong, Grace. Hope you are well ~

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  22. I really love the tenderness and sensuality in your first sevenling. My heart melts :-) "We travel via rustic train, smelling earth, tasting wind-" I would much prefer this mode of travel over the other. Again, well said ,,,,

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  23. I will kiss you with language and leave the yachts and the oceans speak to each other.

    Be Well Grace

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  24. I really love the second one. It feels like preparation to simple adventure.

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