Tuesday, April 5, 2016

Train of my thoughts while riding one

Picture credit:   Pierre Folk

My head is plateau of unfin-
ished stories 
I wriggle with ideas, wet
with sudden downpour

Houses with secret doors 
& streets, unmarked
I thread fallen petals & keys, 
a necklace of lost hours

I marvel at the couple
standing face to face in crowd
their faces blooming as first
day of spring, sweeter 
than a sugar cup

My shoes are melting
with laughter from gossiping ladies 
& cooing with toddler strapped
in the stroller, wriggling his socks off

Though each train ride is a chameleon,
it's a constant clock in our city life-
Here comes my station stop
At click of door chime, I fly away-

Posted for D'verse Poets Pub -  Wheels of Steel, hosted by Bjorn Rudberg ~   I take the train everyday on my way to work so I see many kinds of people riding it.  
Thanks for the visit ~


  1. Love your title, Grace. And you KNOW I love those "ished stories." Awesome line break. :)

  2. I agree, those line breaks add to the beauty of your poem and makes it even more enamoring. Beautifully executed.

    Lots of love,

  3. I've never ridden a train to work, never lived where I could. But you gave me a taste of it.

  4. This is delightful, Grace. I love the glimpses from your seat on the train. Delish language too!

  5. Your opening lines had me right there......I love the faces "sweeter than a sugar cup". Love the shoes "melting with laughter from gossiping ladies". Delightful to read. When I visit the city, I love riding the skytrain, and wondering at the stories behind each face.

  6. p.s. Grace, I upgraded my hard drive and seem to have lost your email.....would you please e me at wildwoman2@shaw.ca ? have a question for you, kiddo.

  7. Traveling by commuter train can be that perfect moment to observe and imagine stories ... What is really the secret behind the smiles.

  8. A good way to see many and make stories up for each. I'll never get all the stories out of my brain

  9. Love how you broke up the word "unfinished", and the image of the toddler wriggling his socks off gave me a smile

  10. As a commuter myself, I can relate to your train moments like these. I love the scene with the couple, though!:)

  11. you sound so busy, Grace - I hope studies are going well too.

    I love the train, but they are scarce where I live ~


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