Tuesday, March 19, 2024

cold & lost in the song

 

What was that I see

Over the bridge

Not two lovers walking in dance-steps

Not line of cars threading slowly

Away from the green lamp posts 

To where the lake swallows 

                                               you    


It is bleak darkness

As if the sun is lost behind trees

As if all the colors got sucked out

And wounded tightly in hard fist 

Or is it I who is 

                                               lost                                                            


A bird 

with wings heavy as pewter 

with no driving instinct to return 

To where "home" is

That is nowhere between

                                               me   


and the goddess with lion's mane 

Magnificent but so pale                                 

As ghost, listless and weary as 

                                               i


Where is the zest for life?

What secrets did we keep that broke our peace?

Our yesterdays changed us

All the energy is spent

                                               lost    


And though there is this undeniable longing

inside my chest

To return to the familiar womb

To gather all the light once more

and embrace your laughter


i am content with the cold

absence of

                                               you            



René Magritte, Homesickness (1940), oil on canvas.


Posted for dVerse Poets Pub:   Everything We See, hosted by Melissa Lemay.  Join us when the pub doors open at 3pm for the ekprastic challenge.  Thanks for your visits and comments.

21 comments:

  1. Oh you capture the longing in the painting so well... I could really feel the emotions and the wonderful usage of the trailing words in the end.

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  2. I love the scene-setting in the opening stanza, Grace, and then the ‘bleak darkness / As if the sun is lost behind trees / As if all the colors got sucked out’. What a way to create an atmosphere of homesickness, and what a great layout!

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  3. love the way you have laid this out . like two poems in one really enjoyed

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  4. Where is the zest for life?

    What secrets did we keep that broke our peace?

    Our yesterdays changed us

    All the energy is spent

    these lines - as well as necessary in your oh-so poignant poem - exactly describe the crux of a difficult relationship that I am working my way out of. Thanks for saying it so well, Grace!
    Yes, our yesterdays did change us...


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  5. I love “A bird
    with wings heavy as pewter”

    And you take us on an emotional roller coaster with these “To gather all the light once more
    and embrace your laughter

    i am content with the cold
    absence of
    you”

    A wonderful response to the prompt, Grace.❤️🙏🏻

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  6. I love this one! One of your best I think. I love the line breaks and the palpable sense of yearning.
    i am content with the cold

    absence of

    you

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  7. Wow this so so layered so profound. Luv how this contemplation ended.

    Much♡love

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  8. Reading your words after a long time Grace - I like effect, the focus on one word. The structure works so well.

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  9. Very nice, Grace So many back stories coming together!

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  10. The lion does seem like an idea he has turned his back on. Yet it is still there. You've made me see a different aspect of this painting--exactly what Melissa intended I think.

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  11. The distances are striking in your poem. You get a real sense of the separation here.

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  12. I like the condensation of the message in the single-word lines. Maybe what the lion is thinking as opposed to the verbiose man with wings.

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  13. Such a beautiful soulful poem. It echoes the feeling of the Magritte painting. Suzanne - Wordpress blog - Wayfaring

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  14. Grace, this poem is amazing!! The layers, deep thoughts, the emotion. Beautifully rendered.

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  15. You captured the essence of the painting so effectively, the single word pauses used with skill and empathy. A beautiful read.

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  17. This is wonderful, Grace. I can feel the bleak homesickness, and love the layout, as if there are two poems here.

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  18. The last stanza shows the man/woman angel (dreamtime has no respect for gender!) quite content with the lion as familiar.

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  19. There is such a strong feeling of loss and grief in this poem I felt sad for the subject's pain. That is a fine accomplishment.

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  20. This really moves me, it speaks to elements of my grief and experiences, things said on the outside at last.

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  21. The layers you create, the soulful longing, the line breaks...they work wonderfully to make this a beautiful and melancholic write.

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