What was that I see
Over the bridge
Not two lovers walking in dance-steps
Not line of cars threading slowly
Away from the green lamp posts
To where the lake swallows
you
It is bleak darkness
As if the sun is lost behind trees
As if all the colors got sucked out
And wounded tightly in hard fist
Or is it I who is
lost
A bird
with wings heavy as pewter
with no driving instinct to return
To where "home" is
That is nowhere between
me
and the goddess with lion's mane
Magnificent but so pale
As ghost, listless and weary as
i
Where is the zest for life?
What secrets did we keep that broke our peace?
Our yesterdays changed us
All the energy is spent
lost
And though there is this undeniable longing
inside my chest
To return to the familiar womb
To gather all the light once more
and embrace your laughter
i am content with the cold
absence of
you
René Magritte, Homesickness (1940), oil on canvas.
Posted for dVerse Poets Pub: Everything We See, hosted by Melissa Lemay. Join us when the pub doors open at 3pm for the ekprastic challenge. Thanks for your visits and comments.
Oh you capture the longing in the painting so well... I could really feel the emotions and the wonderful usage of the trailing words in the end.
ReplyDeleteI love the scene-setting in the opening stanza, Grace, and then the ‘bleak darkness / As if the sun is lost behind trees / As if all the colors got sucked out’. What a way to create an atmosphere of homesickness, and what a great layout!
ReplyDeletelove the way you have laid this out . like two poems in one really enjoyed
ReplyDeleteWhere is the zest for life?
ReplyDeleteWhat secrets did we keep that broke our peace?
Our yesterdays changed us
All the energy is spent
these lines - as well as necessary in your oh-so poignant poem - exactly describe the crux of a difficult relationship that I am working my way out of. Thanks for saying it so well, Grace!
Yes, our yesterdays did change us...
I love “A bird
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And you take us on an emotional roller coaster with these “To gather all the light once more
and embrace your laughter
i am content with the cold
absence of
you”
A wonderful response to the prompt, Grace.❤️🙏🏻
I love this one! One of your best I think. I love the line breaks and the palpable sense of yearning.
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absence of
you
Wow this so so layered so profound. Luv how this contemplation ended.
ReplyDeleteMuch♡love
Reading your words after a long time Grace - I like effect, the focus on one word. The structure works so well.
ReplyDeleteVery nice, Grace So many back stories coming together!
ReplyDeleteThe lion does seem like an idea he has turned his back on. Yet it is still there. You've made me see a different aspect of this painting--exactly what Melissa intended I think.
ReplyDeleteThe distances are striking in your poem. You get a real sense of the separation here.
ReplyDeleteI like the condensation of the message in the single-word lines. Maybe what the lion is thinking as opposed to the verbiose man with wings.
ReplyDeleteSuch a beautiful soulful poem. It echoes the feeling of the Magritte painting. Suzanne - Wordpress blog - Wayfaring
ReplyDeleteGrace, this poem is amazing!! The layers, deep thoughts, the emotion. Beautifully rendered.
ReplyDeleteYou captured the essence of the painting so effectively, the single word pauses used with skill and empathy. A beautiful read.
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ReplyDeleteThis is wonderful, Grace. I can feel the bleak homesickness, and love the layout, as if there are two poems here.
ReplyDeleteThe last stanza shows the man/woman angel (dreamtime has no respect for gender!) quite content with the lion as familiar.
ReplyDeleteThere is such a strong feeling of loss and grief in this poem I felt sad for the subject's pain. That is a fine accomplishment.
ReplyDeleteThis really moves me, it speaks to elements of my grief and experiences, things said on the outside at last.
ReplyDeleteThe layers you create, the soulful longing, the line breaks...they work wonderfully to make this a beautiful and melancholic write.
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