Monday, July 24, 2023

song credits (to us)

 

we're blending the lyrics & notes

to strum of guitar riffs


you drunk-sway as goldfish in fish-

bowl


i play the piano (off)key

as soaked flowers  

by summer rain


our faces are blue

with sweet refrains & kisses


bravely, we watermark the album 

with our names



Posted for dVerse Poets Pub - Quadrille:  Pouring Out Our Poems - Hosted by De Jackson.  This is a 44 word post with the chosen word - water.  Join us when the pub doors open at 3pm EST.

15 comments:

  1. Oh, Grace. This is quite simply beautiful. Swaying like those goldfish, as I listen in.

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  2. They are making such beautiful music together. Love this jam session scenario, Grace.

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  3. I love the imagery in your poem, Grace. What great imagery: "you drunk-sway as goldfish in fish-bowl."

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  5. Oh yes, Grace, I love your song credits quadrille, the ‘strum of guitar riffs’ and off-key piano, and especially the thought of drunk-swaying as goldfish in a bowl.

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  6. "our faces are blue
    with sweet refrains & kisses"


    This is so sweet and lovely, Grace!

    Much love,
    David [ben Alexander]
    SkepticsKaddish.com

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  7. I'm totally with David on the bluefaced kissers. Great image in a fine work, Grace, Thanks

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  8. O my this is gorgeous.
    Happy Monday

    Much💜love

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  9. From the sound of your story it really was brave to sign your name to the album. Great descriptions of your session.

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  10. Love this, "you drunk-sway as goldfish in fish-bowl" and your creative use of watermark for the prompt. Music is magic.

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  11. Love the goldfish image and the way you let the words flow free.

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  12. I love this analogy!

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  13. Dreamy. I love this part especially:

    “i play the piano (off)key
    as soaked flowers
    by summer rain”

    ❤️

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