"(There are) many stories which are not on paper, they are written in the bodies and minds of women."
By Amrita Pritam
Unweave these threads across my face
They are bondages that muffles my voice
My word has weight, my name has grace
What you see with nary a shadow or trace
Of question, interest or life, is a mirage
Unweave these threads across my face
You'll hear my sad songs welling from vase
Broken a long time ago, a bleak montage
My word has weight, my name has grace
I recall them, underneath this shame of lace
Over my thin shoulders cowed low
Unweave these threads across my face
That you will see me truly, in a place
Worthy & joyful. I'll let the words steep, stir-
My word has weight, my name has grace
Out of my belly & bosom, into your palms
To hold my face, bare, sun-warmed
Unweave these threads across my face
My words have weight, my name has grace
Posted for dVerse Poets Pub, Poetics: Women are people: invoking Amrita Pritam with guest host, Punam Sharma. Join us when the pub doors open at 3pm EST.
THIS is poetry... a great Villanelle... and such a good use of the quote... to include your name in the line
ReplyDeleteMy words has weight, my name has grace
is brilliant
Agreeing with Bjorn. There is a wordweave implying deception and rejection and then a clearing of the tangle for a moment of bared-open contentment and being seen truly. May you feel the sun on yout face ...
ReplyDeleteVery strong message, whatever the "threads" are--burka, fist, duct tape...we must all assist in liberating the face, voice and heart. I had some difficulty with "my words has weight". I'm used to "my words have weight"; smile.
ReplyDeleteCorrected - Thanks Glenn.
DeleteMy words has weight - seems to reduce all of her words to a single entity, one that indeed has weight. Very nice!
ReplyDeleteGrace- what an incredible response to the prompt. It's beautiful.
ReplyDeleteGoing to refer to you as "Exquisite Grace" .....
ReplyDeleteWonderfully written Grace!
ReplyDeleteThis stanza stands out:
ReplyDelete"That you will see me truly, in a place
Worthy & joyful. I'll let the words steep, stir-
My word has weight, my name has grace"
Simply lovely to read, like a jaunt on a summer's day. I really like how you used your name throughout the telling :-)
ReplyDeleteA powerful plea, Grace. I was reminded of Paul Dunbar's, "We Wear the Mask."
ReplyDeleteWonderful. The image of threads unweaving is so powerful.
ReplyDeleteSo beautifully done, Grace. Lovely rhymes (and with your name), and the repetition is so effective.
ReplyDeleteWow, and that first line pulled me, such a powerful reflection.
ReplyDeleteThe theme is beautifully woven...the form masterfully untangled!
ReplyDeleteBeautiful! :)
ReplyDeleteWonderful, Grace! This is so powerful.
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