paint me a mirage of purple and lilacs
to bouquet the sky of grey & icy nights-
spring awaits, choir of colors, firebox-
i watch the rain hammer the bare backs
of trees as sun billows behind bland whites-
paint me a mirage of purple and lilacs
my hands are tarred in disquiet sacs
viewing heads of dead roses, a fright-
where's spring, choir of colors, firebox?
my eyes are strained, seeing snow in cracks
of climbing walls & flower pots, knitted tight
is this season a mirage of purple and lilacs?
i count the hours where i'll sit on hammock,
read my books with slow pace and re-write
spring's arrival with choir of colors, firebox-
the gem in my canvas of cottonwood & hemlock-
my footsteps turn to fancy and air light
paint me, in a mirror of purple and lilacs
as spring arrives in choir of colors & firebox!
An edited post for dVerse Poets - Villanelle, Poetry Form, hosted by Sarah Connors. This is the 4th poetry form for dVerse and the link will be open for 1 month. Join us with your villanelle.
You’ve painted this portrait of still icy spring in beautiful colours, Grace – a true choir of colours. I love the contrast of cottonwood & hemlock with the mirror of purple and lilacs.
ReplyDeleteA sweet ode to Spring's slow arrival. A perfect use of villanelle; especially liked how you tweaked the refrain lines to fit in different stanzas.
ReplyDeleteFascinating -- I could feel the passage of time, see the canvas and feel the expectation. Fun
ReplyDeleteSo picturesque in its colours and images — it's wonderful how the refrains work so well here, giving it a lovely melody of the arrival of spring. I loved the closing stanza particularly. :-)
ReplyDeleteThose hammock hours are getting closer, hopefully
ReplyDeleteThis is so beautiful. You write so effortlessly.
ReplyDeleteWe are all waiting to join in that chorus.
ReplyDeleteWhat a lovely villanelle to spring Grace!
ReplyDeleteA lovely poem. I particularly like the repeating lines (and their slight changes).
ReplyDeleteBeautiful poem Grace, vibrant and enticing! :-)
ReplyDeletelovely ~
ReplyDeleteI love how you captured the colors and the anticipation of spring... I felt a bit of that today walking in the wonderful spring.
ReplyDeleteThis is so delightful, Grace. You captured that anticipation for spring.
ReplyDeleteHappy weekend.
-imelda
How absolutely gorgeous, and I love your intricate, unpredictable rhymes. Once again, you show us how it's done!
ReplyDeleteI like how the mirage becomes a mirror.
ReplyDeleteSuch harmony of lines and rhymes in your choir. You handle this form with such ease. And for me lilacs always heralded in the spring.
ReplyDeleteA beautiful write Grace, we still have a chill in the air too and are waiting for those lovely purple and lilacs �� xxx
ReplyDeleteBeautiful. Purple and lilacs have such a lovely ring to them
ReplyDeleteTo bouquet the grey sky & icy nights - love this line!
ReplyDeleteThis is beautiful...especially the word choice. It reminds me of an impressionist painting.
ReplyDeletethe visuals of this villanelle are breathtaking, Grace!
ReplyDeleteI love the opening stanza and these lines add to the magic of the repetition throughout the Villanelle.
ReplyDeleteI hope spring is blooming your way.