The others wagered
that is a mistake
With a flint of steel
she said No, I had enough
After a decade of numbers
& files of business meetings-
This feels right & good
My mistake will be not to give this a chance-
So she took a one-way ticket
out of city with a single luggage
There are rivers, mellowed safe
from childhood
And there is a river that you
choose over others
It surges
twisting deeply
you fight
to keep it moving
As it flows to an uncertain distant point-
size of pinhead or crest of mountain top
Ideas leap in your head
A jar of fireflies, a box of yellow daisies
Some days, you catch light-patterns shifting
glowing new, a world only lovers see
Sometimes, you see nothing but sands
& weight of stillness is deafening
Over a bottle of cheap wine
in a rented motel room, that night
On a lark, you draw
monkeys fallin
g from t r
e e
s*
Posted for D'verse Poets Pub - Poetics: Even Monkeys Fall from Trees* - With guest host, CC ~ Thanks for the visit ~
I really love how how you tied it up... it might have been a mistake, but the ride was fine... and monkeys can climb the trees again.
ReplyDeleteYes indeed. Monkeys can climb right back into the tree and start swinging again. It may have been a mistake, but at least the effort was tried.
ReplyDeleteThis is absolutely gorgeous writing Grace :D love how you wrap up at the end.
ReplyDeleteLots of love,
Sanaa
Well, though I haven't written yet I am reading the poetry for CC's prompt, thinking I might be inspired. To be honest I cannot figure out what mistake in your life you have written about here though I have read the poem a number of times. Perhaps I missed something.
ReplyDeletePer CC after the quote: Write a poem inspired by mistakes–it doesn’t really even necessarily have to be your own mistake; it could be your objective (or not-so-objective) take on someone else’s mistake–feel free to use the prompt in whatever way it inspires you~
DeleteI wrote this based on someone else career choices- leaving corporate life to pursue another field ~
Ah, now I understand!
DeleteAnd there is a river that you
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So many of these rivers, it seems, in our life journey. It doesn't help to look back and wonder where the other one would take you, does it.
Some rivers you can sure go back to, have to watch the monkeys though haha
ReplyDeleteThis leave me breathless, regretful, relieved, thankful. So much spilled here.
ReplyDeleteSo gorgeous....what courage it takes to walk away from the conventional choice and follow a dream....I absolutely LOVE the way you ended it with the visual falling of the letters....so brilliant, Grace :-)
ReplyDeleteReally amazing Grace :)
ReplyDeletexoxo
Really amazing Grace :)
ReplyDeletexoxo
Very clever ending. :)
ReplyDeleteThis is beautiful. I want to fall out of my tree now.
ReplyDeletea beautifully balanced poem of adventure, the flow of consequences - seems you still have that "jar of fireflies, a box of yellow daisies"
ReplyDeleteyou admit that the journey is sometimes hard, but also show that it is worthwhile to forge your own path!
ReplyDeleteOne has to take the risks but there are decisions to be made in between which can be specifically intimidating.
ReplyDeleteHank
Cheers to taking chances and charting the unknown! Oh, I love the way you present your poem <3
ReplyDeleteAs I said, not all missteps are mistakes. And mistakes are just a different way of doing things, right? A good write, Grace!
ReplyDeleteFabulous, Grace. Following your heart can't be a mistake, even if it doesn't quite turn out the way you expect. As long as it's for you, that's what matters.
ReplyDeleteI love the rivers mellowed safe from childhood, and the rivers you choose. Love the placement of the monkeys falling from the trees. Perfect!
ReplyDeleteI love the places this poem is taking me. I really enjoyed it.
ReplyDeleteGreetings from London.
Lovely following the heart poem!
ReplyDeleteJust coming back from
ReplyDeletetalking about pregnancies
that and this reminds me..
the first time in years
i noticed a flower
was after my
wife had a baby..
Work truly kills
beauty without even
realizing it's even gone..
now work is gone gone gone..
AND ALL
ALL OF iT
iS Beauty NOW..:)
"So she took a one-way ticket
ReplyDeleteout of city with a single luggage"
Whoa, hold on, wait a minute--I have never--not once--ever see, not even my very minimalist wife, leave the city with only a single piece of luggage.
That said- I do love the dream scape quality of this poem Grace, it flows through the couplets like water seeking a place to nourish, accomplish its purpose.
Out of the city and into the country. Thank you for sharing. Have a beautiful weekend.
ReplyDeleteSometimes a one-way ticket with a single suitcase is all one needs to find themselves...
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