Thursday, June 11, 2015

Promises


Picture credit:   here

woman's eyes
catch his
lie
smooth as silk red-purple tie-
he smiles giddily
neck strained
faking remorse
with hands perfumed
lilac,
words drip honey-dew, sweetest
of plums
 ~ promises ~
plums of
sweetest, dew-honey drip on words
lilac
perfumed hands with
remorse, faking
strained neck
giddily, he smiles
(as he) ties purple-red silk smoothly
(the) lie
his, catches
woman's eyes

Posted for D'verse Poets Pub - A twist for Palindrome form, hosted by Mary ~   Thanks for the visit ~
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30 comments:

  1. MaryJune 11, 2015 at 9:30 AM

    Excellent 'palindrome,' Grace. You worked the form beautifully. Women's eyes are perceptive eyes. They see what is beneath the surface, are not fooled by giddy smiles.

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  2. GabriellaJune 11, 2015 at 9:39 AM

    Great use of the form! I did not think about the possibility of having shorter lines but I find that the way you use them adds a lot to your poem as it seems to mirror the woman's quick and perceptive looks.

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  3. 21 WitsJune 11, 2015 at 9:42 AM

    Perfect words describes a woman's eyes totally! Great photo too.

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  4. XJune 11, 2015 at 9:56 AM

    Nice, your few additions and modifications make this flow smooth. I like how the turn line is highlighted there in the middle as well. After the turn it got really emotive as well. Well played.

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  5. Pat HattJune 11, 2015 at 10:07 AM

    Only a fool would think they can fool such eyes

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  6. Gloria BakerJune 11, 2015 at 10:10 AM

    Is a great shot Grace and nice poem!}xo

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  7. AnonymousJune 11, 2015 at 10:20 AM

    This is awesome!

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  8. Sherry Blue SkyJune 11, 2015 at 11:05 AM

    WOW, this is a spectacular palindrome, the reversal makes his behavior even more guilty-sounding.......loved it. Can almost see him, face all red........

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  9. Sumana RoyJune 11, 2015 at 11:06 AM

    an awesome palindrome Grace...truly mirroring some truths...

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  10. Marcoantonio Arellano (Nene)June 11, 2015 at 11:20 AM

    wonderfully written but i felt guilty after reading this (lol)

    Grace-fully said

    gracias

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  11. brudbergJune 11, 2015 at 11:44 AM

    Those lies he ties.. I would think that that requires a smooth operator.. something you would prefer not to get involved with.

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  12. BlogorattiJune 11, 2015 at 1:30 PM

    Brilliant and deliciously vivid.

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  13. Glenn ButtkusJune 11, 2015 at 3:13 PM

    Great take, smooth mirror poem; even harder because you reverse words positions as well as lines. I, also, had to tweak the mirrored lines a bit to even out the backward flow; excellent job on this one.

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  14. VictoriaJune 11, 2015 at 3:26 PM

    Wow, Grace...you worked this in such a way that the palindrome effect seems seamless--perhaps because you wrote it in one stanza. Very nicely executed.

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  15. Rosemary Nissen-WadeJune 11, 2015 at 6:47 PM

    Very nicely done! I like the effect of the uneven lines and slight alterations, making it surprisingly unpredictable.

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  16. Wendy BourkeJune 11, 2015 at 8:06 PM

    Wow! Love this form (and what you've done with it). I will have to give it a try. Wonderful wordsmithing (your forte, Grace). Definitely set my sleaze antennae a-tingling. Smiles.

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  17. kaykualaJune 11, 2015 at 9:51 PM

    Women's eyes are bewitching, the first element on the 'come hither look' to be seen. Beautifully penned, Grace! Great work on the palindrome!

    Hank

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  18. Kathy ReedJune 11, 2015 at 11:37 PM

    This is a true mirrored poem...because the words would not be in the same order witing the lines...well done!!

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  19. UnknownJune 11, 2015 at 11:59 PM

    The shorter lines are perfect for this poem and the way it is all one, instead of separated into two separate stanzas just beyond rock this. I can feel/see her eyes flicking about, seeing all, even see her nostrils flare as she smells the falseness of his lilac scented hands...artificial lilac is just beyond nasty and perfect for this.

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  20. Vandana SharmaJune 12, 2015 at 12:27 AM

    lovely promises to keep

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  21. AnonymousJune 12, 2015 at 1:06 AM

    I'm out of stellar comments, Grace--this poem is stunning!

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  22. vivinfranceJune 12, 2015 at 2:43 AM

    Ah, he's been found out! Well done, Grace.

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  23. lynn__June 12, 2015 at 9:21 AM

    Keen eyes sense the presence of purple danger here; a smashing palindrome, Grace! I also wrote mine as a unified stanza...

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  24. Katie Mia FrederickJune 12, 2015 at 12:42 PM

    (;.. Too them.. for well.. is empathy hell.. in live psychopaths.
    eyes of love see eyes of lies..
    psychopath love.. distilled.. empath of love..
    love of empath.. distilled.. love psychopath..
    lies of eyes see love of eyes..
    psychopaths live in hell .. empathy is well.. for them Too..;)

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  25. UnknownJune 12, 2015 at 3:29 PM

    I really liked how the viewpoint shifted from the woman's point of view with emphasis on her suspicion to his attempt at hiding his lie. Exquisite :D

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  26. Sara McNultyJune 12, 2015 at 11:44 PM

    Wonderful, Grace. Love the lilac and honey-dew drip.

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  27. Blue GrumpsterJune 14, 2015 at 1:18 PM

    Faking remorse... I hate when that happens.

    Hi Grace

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  28. Blue GrumpsterJune 14, 2015 at 1:19 PM

    Faking remorse... I hate when that happens.

    Hi Grace

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  29. Sanaa RizviJune 14, 2015 at 8:18 PM

    A women's eyes are sharp something which the other has to look out for.. lest the lies be caught..! Well penned :D

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  30. grapelingJune 21, 2015 at 11:55 AM

    you've caught him! ~

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