The path of Lost Souls
Photography: Brooke Shaden
in the dead of winter season
you build a trail
of paper boats
beside the dock of black ships
at night, when all is still
you set them sailing towards western sky
where the red moon waits
to run its silver-blue fingers
across its bows, like a violin player
threading silk strings with sweet air
of oblivion
i pause and watch you
waiting by Lethe, underworld river
this is your ritual
disguising tricks with musical flair
to tempt & slaughter my energy
under my red veil,
i conceal my remaining possessions:
witch hazel oil, fire wand
& finally, my mother's crescent -shaped knife
which your rustic hands will gladly pay
for a feast
of my sacrifices
i have given up many things for this voyage -
my innocence to discover names of every truth
my roots to hold one forbidden fruit
& taste its skin & seeds, for myself
and i will not be deterred even if
you say that I am
on the path of lost souls
cusp between earth's deepest divide: shadow & light
a ghost on long dusty road
wind-struck,
searching to find what she has lost
irretrievably
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We are to used at least 3 words from the wordlist from M:
fairy, portal, sacrifice, feast, smoke, winter, slaughter, spirit, veil, ritual, trick, disguise
i love the paper boats... the setting out on a fresh journey to get back what was lost or sacrificed... sometimes it's good to sacrifice... sometimes it's good to set sails again
ReplyDeleteThe river we all dread.. The pictures are stark yet so beautiful... just like we expect it to be... or at least hope it to be..
ReplyDeletewow all the three themes woven into one! and the impact is marvelous.
ReplyDeleteWorking from word lists & an image can be very productive, & fun; your efforts here are sterling, mysterious, introspective, mystical, magical--a very strong poetic that needs several readings to even begin to peel back its layers, symbols, & meanings. Like the lines /my roots to hold one forbidden fruit/& taste its skin & seeds, for myself/. Salute & smile.
ReplyDelete"I have given up many things for this voyage"...as we all do. This truly resonates with me. Love the story, love that she has some tools hidden to help her survive.......love the voyage of discovery she is making.
ReplyDeleteGroovy piece. Love the image of the ghost on the long dusty road.
ReplyDeleteMany things have to be set aside as on the journey we continue until the river ends
ReplyDeleteLove the way you have reimagined Persephone's story & the paper boats & autumnal, Halloweeny atmosphere. Wonderful stuff. Thank you.
ReplyDelete.... still hoping to do my final voyage, which would be world trip on a working ship ... until then, I just travel short term... smiles ... http://ckpeacemaker.wordpress.com/ ... Love, cat.
ReplyDeleteThis is really amazing and touching Grace
ReplyDeleteLove the paint too!
Beautiful. I love that she is brave and ready for her voyage. I felt a healthy defiance of obstacles and yearning to become. This poem is wonderful!
ReplyDeleteThe storytelling sets the stage. Beautiful Grace.
ReplyDeleteAnd thanks for the OLN reminder. I have been away so long, I forgot about it.
ReplyDeleteThis is a great poem, the last two stanzas I absolutely love, Grace. I can identify with giving things up to take a voyage, a former sense of self, but with a hope and some faith that the discovery will be worthwhile.
ReplyDeleteSo hard when one searches for what one has lost...and realizes it is irretrievably lost. Ah, I guess a person just has to move on and move beyond.....
ReplyDeleteI like how your opening stanza sets the wistful tone of your poem, Grace, and the great image of the paper boats. You have written a very atmospheric poem here.
ReplyDeleteI am almost speechless. This poem is so graceful, pulling the reader in and leaving us sated. I love it.
ReplyDeletei like the conceals concoctions - very witch like. now i wanna take a potions class at Hogsworth.
ReplyDeleteGrace, a haunting poem, that leaves one feeling the blade of sacrifices made in the journey towards the light.
ReplyDeleteAhh.. the search for truth can be a difficult trail.. one where truth often separates us from those we love.. and can we know it.. is always the dilemma as we keep seeking.. and finding forevermore...
ReplyDeleteThis is such a great piece Grace--your sense of mood here is tangible
ReplyDeleteBeautifully stated Grace, some very profound images within your words.
ReplyDeleteOh forever--like La Llorona! Do you know of her? Freaky scary, and the ferry man cannot take her though he may try and trick her ... to be so lost with a price so high! At least she kept her ritual blade.
ReplyDeleteJourneys can be both scary, & exciting. I think yours is filled with both wonder & determination, .grace. Good luck! Lovely poem. xVivchook
ReplyDeleteGreat approach to both prompts, Grace--I feel like this is a journey of poetry you are on. k.
ReplyDeleteI particularly love the beauty and feel of this verse:
ReplyDeleteto run its silver-blue fingers
across its bows, like a violin player
threading silk strings with sweet air
of oblivion
janet
Sometimes I think we are all on the path of lost souls, and those rock throwers always live in glass houses...
ReplyDeleteWav, Grace fantastic poem!
ReplyDeleteThe first seven lines have a beautyful, sailing rytm.....
Hugs
JetteMajken
Such beautiful and soulful piece, Grace - you captivate me once again.
ReplyDeletei have given up many things for this voyage -
ReplyDeletemy innocence to discover names of every truth
my roots to hold one forbidden fruit
One has to put up with a lot of sacrifices on the way to better oneself. All the time one yearns for support from loved ones which might not be forthcoming! Great lines Grace!
Hank
Sacrifices are very empting as we all move through to new seasons in life and our travels. Funny how it always seems to be in the falls and late springs. You make the trip a very solemn repose.
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oh my, this is so achingly beautiful... i want to be lost with her, she knows how to see.
ReplyDeletereally cool write...neat contrast in the opening as well between the paper boats by the big dark ships...i think the paper ones can have as much power as the larger ones...giving up the innocence of finding the names of all the truthes...that is a telling part for me, there....
ReplyDeleteloved the selection of adjectives making the senses come alive on this adventure
ReplyDeleteYour handsomely constructed Poem could be a fitting description of the soul of it's final word. So nicely done
ReplyDeleteALOHA from Honolulu
ComfortSpiral
=^..^= . <3
The images symbolizing end of life, traveling westbound, a captivating tale of lost souls.
ReplyDeleteLove this part, Grace:
ReplyDelete"red moon waits
to run its silver-blue fingers"
Grace, seamless portrait that so clearly depicts what you've framed in the title. Thanks for adding your voice to the word list prompt, and have a good week ~
ReplyDeleteThis piece is mysterious and ominous at the same time. It complements the photo very well. :-)
ReplyDeleteI just wonder why the comment window says the comment is from "Anonymous". Have I been away from your blog that long? :-)
~Imelda
Loved the visualization in this piece ... very beautiful :-)
ReplyDeleteLove...I just wrote about paper boats :).....beautiful.
ReplyDeleteLove this Grace, what a beautifully crafted poem!
ReplyDeletethere was a whimsy at the start that seemed to veer into the ominous. really nicely written.
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