Thursday, August 28, 2014

Two masks

daylight stitches your face unmoved by wheels
tar-washed by city's million clicking heels
you look for a summer bouquet to melt
this metallic mask to jade, soft as teal 
~0~0~


Artist:  Dale Dunning


the night is a trigger, itching for key
to peel the mask away as bony tree
what price did the fat moon exact from you?
not pearls but your bare heart, black-steeped in tea



Posted for D'verse POets Pub - Ruba'i and Rubaiyiat,  Hosted by Bjorn Rudberg
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29 comments:

  1. Brian MillerAugust 28, 2014 at 7:24 PM

    wow. i feel the weight of the day time mask...of how all the chaos and walking feet...and all that goes into the grit of work and such works its way in...the heart black steeped in tea is a great line as well to end on...

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  2. AnonymousAugust 28, 2014 at 7:50 PM

    I like how you brought in both day and night...the second stanza being a resolution to the first.

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  3. UnknownAugust 28, 2014 at 8:13 PM

    softness of day vs the chill of night. the bare heart, black-steeped in tea is brilliant... the heaviness of the mask is felt throughout ~

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  4. Audrey Howitt aka DivaloungerAugust 28, 2014 at 8:25 PM

    Wow Grace-great imagery here!

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  5. ayalaAugust 28, 2014 at 8:26 PM

    not pearls but your bare heart, black-steeped in tea...a great line, Grace. Great poem.

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  6. Pat HattAugust 28, 2014 at 8:38 PM

    Night can bring out the crazies lol or maybe just a little fun

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  7. Gloria BakerAugust 28, 2014 at 8:43 PM

    Amazing!:)

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  8. GabriellaAugust 28, 2014 at 9:06 PM

    I like how the two stanzas complement each other. 'Not pearls but your bare heart, black-steeped in tea' - amazing image.

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  9. MaryAugust 28, 2014 at 9:07 PM

    This is very effective, Grace. I like the way you worked both day and night!

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  10. kaykualaAugust 28, 2014 at 9:41 PM

    what price did the fat moon exact from you?
    not pearls but your bare heart, black-steeped in tea

    The most likely expectation is sympathy and concern from the heart though this might not be appreciated - steeped in black! Great lines Grace!

    Hank

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  11. TruedessaAugust 28, 2014 at 9:46 PM

    Grace, I can feel the weight in your words..maybe it is all about balance ...

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  12. BodhiroseAugust 28, 2014 at 11:35 PM

    I think we can assign different masks to sometimes get us through our days...and nights. Very strong images, Grace...gave me a feeling of wishing for something else...perhaps dispensing with those masks.

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  13. brudbergAugust 28, 2014 at 11:54 PM

    This is a perfect example. Two poems complementing each other.. The day with that city mask, and then the night with its connection to nature.. Both masks a strain in itself.. The fat moon's price.. I like that a lot..

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  14. UnknownAugust 29, 2014 at 12:09 AM

    my computer crashed today, so having trouble leaving comments: loved what you did with this one, Grace.

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  15. Cressida de NovaAugust 29, 2014 at 12:23 AM

    Good imagery !

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  16. UnknownAugust 29, 2014 at 12:26 AM

    Very rich verse.

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  17. AnonymousAugust 29, 2014 at 1:08 AM

    I thought the poems fit, in pace and meter and it was pleasurable to speak them out loud.

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  18. ClaudiaAugust 29, 2014 at 2:56 AM

    summer in the city... there's magic in it but also something revealing... loved esp... not pearls but your bare heart, black-steeped in tea..

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  19. UnknownAugust 29, 2014 at 3:10 AM

    What a fantastic, magical poem. The mask is a wonderful piece of art.
    The combination is great!

    Hugs
    JetteMajken

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  20. WolfsrosebudAugust 29, 2014 at 8:00 AM

    totally different for you... a bit of a mystery

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  21. the walking manAugust 29, 2014 at 8:12 AM

    The moon and i have a deal, it extracts no price from me and I allow it to maintain its orbit. We negotiated over terms and came to what we considered to be fair.

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  22. Sharon Rose ThomasAugust 29, 2014 at 11:31 AM

    Great imagery here with black heart as tea...Leaves a lot to ponder and form is great.

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  23. Sumana RoyAugust 29, 2014 at 12:59 PM

    so difficult to take off the mask once put on...the last line says it all...

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  24. BeachannyAugust 29, 2014 at 10:33 PM

    Nice contrast in the two quatrains - has a tanka quality to it - it seems to me.

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  25. AnonymousAugust 30, 2014 at 12:58 AM

    I imagined Dr. Jekyll/Mr. Hyde. I can imagine darkness as a good foil for bringing out the darkness of the soul and pulling out the lovely veneer that one wears int he light.

    Happy weekend, Grace. :-)

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  26. ^.^August 30, 2014 at 8:58 AM

    Lovely ... reminds me of Amsterdam 1970 ... and that was lovely ... smiles

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  27. PamAugust 30, 2014 at 9:52 AM

    Very nice. Great imagery and awesome fat moon and magic everywhere.

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  28. RMPAugust 30, 2014 at 11:03 AM

    These pair well together. The daylight mask wears heavy. The second piece weighs heavy, bleeding the heart as it does....really like the last line in this one.

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  29. AnonymousAugust 30, 2014 at 12:30 PM

    these are cool, Grace. hope you have a good weekend ~

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