you had me running
lightning fast across fallen leaves -
weaved of copper and russet gold -
old woods heaved, washed of rain,
strains of birdsong and mating sounds -
ground is softened earth,
dearth of salt and sea breeze -
trees rustle as tongues meet,
wheat-hued sky, bare throats - summer heat
Posted for Imaginary Garden with Real Toads - Transforming Friday ~
and Sunday's Challenge - Chained Rhyme : Poetry form:"Linked rhyme (or chained rhyme) chimes the last syllable or syllables of a line with the first syllable or syllables of the next line…" ~ Thanks for the visit ~
really lovely Grace and love the pictures, are perfect!
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DeleteReally like this rhyme pattern and I'm off to try my hand at it. Yours is very smooth and I didn't even realize WHY it worked so beautifully until I read the explanation.
ReplyDeleteThank you Margaret ~ Was fun to do the challenge form ~
DeleteGreat imagery as you brought the warmth alive, can't wait for it to come and get rid of this stinkin snow.
ReplyDeleteYes, we are snowed under ~ Thanks Pat for the visit ~
DeleteThank you Loredana ~
ReplyDeleteThis is really excellent, Heaven--soft, inconspicuous and very natural the form seems at the tip of your pen. I imagine most readers might not even realize it was there--always the test of a good use of form, in my opinion. I love using the lizard qualities to represent sensuality, too--very creatively conceived, and neatly executed. Thanks for playing!
ReplyDeleteThank you for the wonderful challenge form Hedgewitch ~
Deleteoo la la...love....the lightning in the leaves...the rustle at tongues touch....really cool use of nature in this...and nice sensuality as well....
ReplyDeleteLove the poetic response..la..la....Thanks Brian ~
DeleteReally nice Grace, it has a nice flow to it.
ReplyDeleteThank you Tatius ~
DeleteMastery, here, Grace. Not only is the form respected, but the imagery and meaning is clear and relatable. Sexy and simultaneously sweet, this poem entwines nature, lust and humanity.
ReplyDeleteThank you Kim ~ Was fun to entwine lust with nature ~
DeleteI ran with the little one in joy of the sun and the ground swollen with the detritus of seasons. I so love a warm throat while touching tongues!
ReplyDeleteThank you Susan ~
DeleteThis is absolutely beautiful! I love visiting here for my dose of romance.
ReplyDeleteWell I should write more about romance ~ Thanks Teresa ~
DeleteThis is lovely writing. Your description brings the scene to life so vividly.
ReplyDeleteThank you Kerry ~
DeleteYes, I can feel the heat. (The last of my water tanks ran dry onthe weekend.)
ReplyDeleteToo bad, I hate it when that happens ~ Thanks JCN~
DeleteLove how you combined two prompts so masterfully! The photos are great too!
ReplyDeleteBeautiful poem!
ReplyDeleteOh, lovely. I like the progression of seasons and pairing with the sensual.
ReplyDeleteYou used the chain rhyme to perfection; and you created a beautiful scene with your words!
ReplyDeleteThis is hot. So hot! And so welcome here where our -18 feels like -24 with the windchill.
ReplyDeleteYou have taken the form and made it your own, Grace.
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I like!
ReplyDeleteSo beautiful grace...With your words I could see the small creature scurry across the leaves.
ReplyDeleteWow! Silly me...I thought you were talking lizards here! ;-)
ReplyDeleteReally lovely chained rhyme.
I just love what you did with this one, Grace...such a way with words!! ♥
ReplyDeleteYou have done a wonderful poem with a challenging form,,,I love the sensual feeling building to your "summer heat",,,
ReplyDeleteThis is such a beautiful poem and so very peaceful.
ReplyDeleteAlmost makes me wish I was young enough to run through the forests again.
ReplyDeleteThis was beautiful! Have a wonderful week.
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