gold and lilac
wafts and pillars an old man's face --
ethereal sky
~0~0~
Picture credit: Reena of Missing Moments
~0~0~
the afternoon,
unwrapped burlap,
shimmers like gold coins under the sun
Posted for Imaginary Garden with Real Toads - A Word with Laurie
Haiku My Heart
and Haiku Heights - New ~ HAPPY NEW YEAR ~
The 2nd haiku is so beautiful ... lovely scenery glowed by words !!!
ReplyDeleteAhh... so beautiful. I especially like the second one, Grace. Thanks for taking part in the prompt.
ReplyDeleteExtremely pretty!
ReplyDeleteEven the photograph is very beautiful.
You have a beautiful way of conveying.
Take Care :)
The second haiku is just breathtaking!
ReplyDeleteThis is so rich in word and picture. Thank you Grace for this beauty...
ReplyDeleteSo beautiful !
ReplyDeleteBoth are beautifully composed.
ReplyDeleteBoth are wonderful ~ favorite is the 2nd one ~ ^_^
ReplyDeleteHappy New Year to you ~ (A Creative Harbor aka ArtMuseDog and Carol ^_^)
Love the gold coins shimmering under the sun! Happy New Year!
ReplyDeleteooohh pretty!
ReplyDeleteThe visual perfectly illustrates your brief and beautiful piece. Lovely!
ReplyDeletejust amazing Grace!
ReplyDeleteYou write so beauty-fully...
ReplyDeleteI snuck a peek below to read more, just wonderful♥
Such a nice sight and brought to life, wish it were that here instead of the snow that is to come.
ReplyDeleteAll the best things come in burlap -- coffee, wheat, afternoons. Love that! And old men's faces are great aren't they for comparing things to.
ReplyDeleteHope you have had a great day!
xoxo
I love the reference to an old man's face. Your second haiku is brilliant!
ReplyDeletenice...i really like that second one grace...the afternoon being unwrapped burlap, the shimmering gold coins....very nice...
ReplyDeleteHow do you do that?! So good!
ReplyDeleteThese are magical!! Grace, I equally enjoy the images you depict in each. So well done...powerful brevity!
ReplyDeleteSimply beautiful..awesome.. gold sprikled..
ReplyDeleteThanks Grace for the magic.. Happy haikuing..!!!
RS:)
I really like that second with the shimmering gold coins.
ReplyDeleteSecond one is gorgeous.Happy new Year Grace!
ReplyDeleteI really like the first one most of all. I enjoy a poem that makes me mull it over and "finish the poem" as the haiku experts say.
ReplyDeleteA nice challenge, this second line: "wafts and pillars an old man's face." I have several images in my mind and it's fun to decide which one applies.
I like the "unfinished" side of haiku and letting the readers decide on the message ~ Thanks for sharing your thoughts ~
DeleteBeautiful Grace...
ReplyDeleteLovely--and interesting form. I see both are still seventeen syllables, but don't follow the 5-7-5 format. I'm a creature of habit; I stick with 5-7-5 or 3-5-3 for better or worse, but I might try branching out just a little :)
ReplyDeleteThe English language is different from Japanese so a little leeway is now acceptable. I use to write in such strict format, but have now allowed my lines to find itself, but still within the 17 syllables ~ Thanks for sharing your thoughts ~
DeleteBeautiful haiku both. You captured the essence of the pic.
ReplyDeleteYou write such beautiful haiku
ReplyDeletebeauty in your words
ReplyDeleteFab' image and the two haiku do it more than justice. (Nice to see you are not bound by the 5-7-5 formula.)
ReplyDeleteThank you Dave ~ I like experimenting with the form ~
Deleteframing an old man's face . . . unwrapping the burlap on the day ....each got me dreaming of the relationship between positive and negative (space) and how they dress the same coin.
ReplyDeleteI always come to your blog knowing that I will find a completely different approach to a challenge. This is shimmeringly beautiful, Grace.
ReplyDeletedear all,
ReplyDeletei started early friday with such a bright hope for the day. so many haiku to visit, so many bright promises to fulfill. my day turned quickly on its heels into what became a living hell. for the last three weeks i have been battling extreme health concerns, i share this only to explain why i have been so hard pressed in visiting and leaving comments. yesterday took me to the very edge and this morning although i made it through an adverse med reaction with horrible vertigo, i am weak and undone. i do not like to write about my health issues, something i combat everyday to stay upright and among the living. but i see more and more of our haiku family dwindling away and i am sure many may have mistaken why, and taken it personally that i have failed to visit. this morning i am going to stay up long enough to be sure you all know that you have brought me comfort in my darkest hours without even knowing. for your kindness and patience i thank you with all my heart.
xoxoxox,
rebecca
I understand Rebecca, please don't worry about visiting others as your health is more important ~ Blessings for good health and love ~
DeleteBeautiful, both drip with gold.
ReplyDeleteperfectly sublime; straight to the heart.
ReplyDeleteHappy New Year to you!
Two beautiful haiku, Grace, and I adore the title "One golden afternoon"...so lovely.
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AAh,I wonder what there might be to unwrap in the shimmer of the sunset?
ReplyDeleteTruly wonderful. You are gifted
ReplyDeleteI like the image of the unwrapped burlap. Happy holidays.
ReplyDeleteBoth haiku wonderful, both full of graceful words.
ReplyDeleteMy favorite line: shimmers like gold coins under the sun.
Happy New Year!
(I think one "n" is gone in the afternoon, Grace)
The image of the ethereal sky and your shimmering poetry evoked warmth and joy...lovely haiku..
ReplyDeletelovely haiku
ReplyDeleteYour writing shimmers today! Happy New Year, Grace!
ReplyDeleteLovely, both picture and haiku! Happy new year, Grace!!
ReplyDeletesublime n btfl ...
ReplyDeleteI like the image of unwrapped burlap. Your words always shimmer. Happy New Year, Grace! Wishing you all the best. :-)
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