pale skin under the sky
bare limbs, empty of sheath
color of autumn - cherry red
like your lips - parting mine
~0~0
falling leaves on green meadow
caressing softly arms and hips
color of autumn - golden orange
like your hands - warming fire
~0~0
half-crescent moon in cool night
glimmering dew on maple skin
color of autumn - plum purple
like your eyes - raging storm
Posted for OpenLinkNight - Imaginary Garden with Real Toads (Monday)
and D'verse Poets Pub (Tuesday)
Poetry form: Jue ju (Chinese)
Line length: 5 words per line
Lines per stanza: 4
Theme: Often suggestive of erotic love
Rhyme scheme: couplets or unrhymed
Picture credit: here
I love autumn colors Grace!!
ReplyDeleteThis is really beauty!!
Thank you Gloria ~
Deleteunrhymed you say, who made up such a rule for display? haha Truly brought into play factors that are great to touch, as fall rings through very much. First first, Brian is worst.
ReplyDeletePfft glory dear is going back in the dirt.
DeletePat you are so funny ~ Ha..ha...Thanks for the visit ~
DeleteMmmm
ReplyDeleteParting lips
Warming fires
Raging storms
A lovely night to stay in, i say
And Grace, just to remind you~you're north of the border
Good luck making white sensual
hee hee
I'm trying Rick ~ Thanks for the lovely words and comments ~
Deletecolor of autumn - plum purple
ReplyDeletelike your eyes - raging storm
I like the 3rd stanza. It's in keeping with the erotic stance of the form. Nicely Grace!
Hank
nice...i love how these build in intensity....as you close each one its like a nice BANG of intimacy...esp that first one...well done grace....love them...
ReplyDeleteThe colors of cherry red, golden orange, plum purple enrich the lines you have written on this title!
ReplyDeleteso well done! You captured all the beauty of the season in this one!
ReplyDeleteThese go magnificently together! Really enjoyed the flow of these stanzas - each could be its own painting!
ReplyDeleteA wonderful take on autumn ... loved it :-)
ReplyDelete' Like your lips, like your hands, like your eyes '....and your words, basking in sensuality, dripping with syrupy maple sweetness....
ReplyDeleteI find it hard to write with the confines of style, but you did it so well. Great form too.
ReplyDeleteVery pretty sensual poems. Lovely. k.
ReplyDeleteLove them!
ReplyDeleteLovely parade of increasingly intense colors through this, pacing the sense of intimacy. I like this form, very well done here, Heaven.
ReplyDeleteSo, so beautiful. Sensual, loving. I love the tenderness in all of this. The beauty of autumn is here in full now. Yesterday, I walked through an almost, red carpet of leaves. Amazing. Loved this Grace.
ReplyDeleteMasterful. Gorgeous, Grace. You are one of my favorites that I've come across on the web. Thanks for sharing!
ReplyDeletelovely and sensuous....enjoyed the verses very much and also the picture..thanks
ReplyDeleteAutumn colors seem to spread--like the plumes of a male peacock--in order to seduce to touch the "reader" with the power of gods.
ReplyDeletelovely lovely poem!
ReplyDeleteLovely! I'm not familiar with that from, but I liked it.
ReplyDeleteI meant that "form" of course. :)
Deletefabulous use of the form... love, love, love the imagery
ReplyDeleteI'm not familiar with this form but you've made it sound beautiful... I especially liked
ReplyDeletecolor of autumn - cherry red
like your lips - parting mine
You do have a beautiful way with words. I just noticed your statement that you've been writing since 2010? Wow... I'm very impressed. You make it look so easy.
I am a late bloomer in writing ~ Thank you, but I owe a lot to the communities I am involved in like Real Toads and D'verse ~
Deletehmmm...some nice heat in those...autumn is a sensual season for sure..
ReplyDeleteA person could follow the sun and never be out of summer...this makes me want to follow autumn. Great job!
ReplyDeleteSuch beautiful colors and images, Grace. I like how each one reminds you of someone.
ReplyDeleteYour lovely poem evokes the BEST of autumn, Grace.
ReplyDeleteVery kool. I like the way it sounded out loud. I'm going to see a girl tomorrow with a far east accent and have her read it to me. I have to know what it sounds like. I bet it rocks. Excellente write!
ReplyDeleteLovely. The image of leaves brushing against her body, gorgeous. Glimmering dew, maple, and plum...so delicious. Love the passion in the end. Such a treat, Grace!
ReplyDeletelove the touch of sensuality! wonderful, Heaven!
ReplyDelete♥
I like this. How nice to juxtapose autumn with passion. Your writing is always unique.
ReplyDeleteGorgeous! Love the exchange (dance?) of colors and passion, a wonderful rhythm and flow, love those images too. :-)
ReplyDeleteAbsolutely gorgeously woven! Really lovely piece, pleased to read you again hon xoxo
ReplyDeleteJue ju is a form I hadn't encountered before and I love your poems subtle eroticism...in my opinion, it is so much more effective than that which is blatantly expressed. Beautiful juxtaposition of autumn and love.
ReplyDeleteIt's such a beautiful palette of colors and words... and so sensual!
ReplyDeleteI love how you multitask!
Nicely done...especially with the progression and erotic content ;)
ReplyDeleteJust beautiful ... exquisite!!
ReplyDeleteGorgeous Grace--this form suits your writing style so well!
ReplyDeleteVery nice, thanks for sharing.
ReplyDeleteSpectacular photo - I love how you wove the beauty of autumn through the way you see the one you love. Very beautiful.
ReplyDeleteBeautiful :)
ReplyDeletegroayla
This is very vivid. I love the colors of autumn.
ReplyDeleteautumn motifs have always been my fave!
ReplyDeleteThe photo is as lovely as your words. Well done!
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