Monday, May 20, 2019

cake


i watch rain clouds roil the sky
then knead & butter the soil  

birds and small creatures honey- 
comb & sword-peck on seeds, grains

it's a feast-
specially the cake's throne topper-

spring maiden rules
dotting dandelions, daffodils, daisies

i soup & eat 
slowly, richly 





Dandelions by Grace@EverydayAmazing


Posted for dVerse Poets Pub - Quadrille, hosted by Kim Russell.  This is a 44 word post  with the chosen word, RICH.  See you when the pub doors open for poetry reading at 3pm EST.   

29 comments:

  1. I wish to have such an experience.... May is lovely here, but it's way to dry... love the imagery of a nature as sweet and rich as a cake.

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  2. Luscious! I really like this poem, Grace.

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  3. Oh, I like this conceit. I can picture it, almost taste it. All that yellow has a buttery flavour.

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  4. The title and lowercase ‘i’ made this quadrille stand out for me, Grace – and then I read the opening lines and gasped! Nature is indeed a rich feast on which I love to sup. I love the alliteration in ‘dotting dandelions, daffodils, daisies’ and the play on dotting the ‘I’s and crossing the ‘ts’, as well as the implied buttery colour, and the way you’ve left the prompt word until last as emphasis.

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  5. That first stanza is amazing Grace. I never thought of rain kneading and buttering the soil. Wonderful!

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  6. nice comparison of nature and baking~makes the outside world seem so very fattening

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  7. And what a lovely tasty cake nature bakes!

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  8. Very clever and apt metaphor; something fresh and new; loved it--and just when I thought there's nothing new under the sun; smile.

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  9. Love the idea of the clouds kneading and buttering the soil. The word "sword-peck" is a gem.

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  10. This is incredibly breathtaking, Grace!!❤️ How I love the images of "spring maiden rules dotting dandelions, daffodils, daisies." May is certainly a sight to behold!

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  11. Lovely that you focused purely on true beauty...that's where the wealth really lies- in beauty.

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  12. luv this rich share of imagery, bravo, well
    done

    Happy Monday

    much love...

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  13. Love the image of the earth being a cake and the flowers! What richness indeed.

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  14. Nice Grace! Some wonderful inventive images...

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  15. Impressive and unexpected metaphor!

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  16. Those last two lines are perfection.

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  17. rich and delicious feast of words.

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  18. Yellow sprinkles! Love this picture!

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  19. A wonderful metaphor, Grace. I particularly like how the rain clouds "knead & butter the soil."

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  20. Love your celebration of words.

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  21. You offer a rich feast for the senses.

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  22. ah....so sweet. And I am smiling, thinking of my "spring-form" cake pan in which I make the most delicious almond cheese cake. I shall now always think of my spring-form cake pan in a very different way! :)

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  23. You've created a beautiful comparison.

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  24. Yummy! Leave it to nature to bake the best cake!

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  25. I love your perspective and creative word play in this. Nice! These lines especially, "i watch rain clouds roil the sky
    then knead & butter the soil."

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  26. Tasty indeed! ☺️

    -imelda

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