Friday, October 18, 2013

Deep sleep

Mendenhall Ice Caves, Juneau, Alaska


the color
of my sky, deep velvet blue

here the river
gravitates towards its womb:  a cave

carved out
of wind & mountain of solid ice

my hands 
touch the arctic stones, glazed-cobalt walls     

but there's 
no sensation, nothing burns nor sears

the memories 
no awakening but   

silence, haven
suspended time

perhaps
this is my salvation



Posted for Imaginary Garden for Real Toads - Hannah's Challenge - Haunted & Hungry
and Flash Fiction Friday - for the G-man - Happy Friday ~

45 comments:

  1. I feel the chill and the silence in your words. Enjoyed the pic!

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    1. It is cold in that place ~ I forgot to include the location: Mendenhall Ice Caves, Juneau, Alaska~

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  2. the river gravitating toward its womb...great line...the no sensation as well..you build slow the feeling in this...nice haunting.

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  3. Beautifully haunting, a unique write.

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    1. More like a deep sleep ~ Thanks humbird ~

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  5. There was a hush to this...like a spell. I loved it, Grace. Hope you had a lovely Thanksgiving.

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    1. It was a relaxing long weekend ~ Thanks Talon ~

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  6. Since eternity man is serching for salvation and this is a wonderful place to achieve it. Nicely done:)

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    1. If it works but I forgot to edit that the location is in Alaska ~ Thanks ~

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  7. Jeez Grace, this is so Dylanesque..."Tangled up in Blue"!
    You are such a creative genius.
    Loved your Azure 55
    Thanks for playing, thanks for your great support, and have a Kick Ass Week-End

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  8. Beautiful, Grace. I love the image of the river/womb and the sense of silence and tranquility.

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  9. You've narrated it as a spiritual silence, a cushioning free of the noise of reality, ice that neither burns nor changes, a super woman's cave of memory and rest. I would like some time in this womb myself.

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  10. Really shined through, even when using yucky cold at your zoo lol

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  11. I could use a place where nothing burns or sears.

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  12. even the couplets are paced as though from quiet breathing ~

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  13. Your poem ... deep as blue velvet.

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  14. Beautiful. Your words paint as lovely a picture as the photo.

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  15. So vivid. Great work with the imagery.

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  16. BEAUTIFUL! Love the concept of "suspended time." And the "deep velvet blue."

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  17. Great choice of words ... captivating.
    Peace
    Siggi

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  18. Lovely use of color, Grace. There is a serenity, too, in something so much larger than oneself.

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  19. So beautiful Grace...I needed the peace of this poem

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  20. great poem especially these last lines...

    silence, haven
    suspended time

    perhaps
    this is my salvation

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  21. Maybe it's just me, but this feels like synchronicity with my poem. Anyway, yours is lovely!

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  22. "here the river
    gravitates towards its womb:"

    That is fantastically written - it meanders smoothly along, settles, soothes.

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  23. A wonderful write, Grace. It's lovely.
    K

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  24. Beautiful.....I love to visit here often....weaving words and ideas is such an art....

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  25. No one wants to get burned ~ your creative imagery is set perfectly alongside your beautiful words Grace once again ~ loved the womb/cave ref. Have a lovely weekend. x

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  26. Hi Grace!

    Nice 55. My favorite stanza is the second, and of course, the ending. What we're all in search of.

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  27. azure blue, cobalt blue, petroleum blue, midnight blue, topaz blue, emerald blue.... don't we just love blue?

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  28. I liked the mother earth reference with the womb. the blues are so striking.

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  29. I love your salvation...I could use some of this blue~
    Happy weekend Grace
    I enjoyed your bluetiful poem

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  30. That is exquisitely beautiful, just a river of salvation. Marvelous.

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  31. I just love the pairing of the vision of the womb and the richness of your closing lines...really poignant as always Grace! Thank you for writing! :)

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  32. Such a beautiful poem and the close is just perfect.

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  33. Grace, late to the show, but I loved the concept of the cave as womb for the waters. This is gorgeous, really fits the image. Amy

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