Thursday, September 21, 2023

flamenca in the plaza

when midnight strikes, let's meet-

bright moon is white knight by

pomegranate tree 

i'll bring my castanets,

clicking lights, red tight skirt


swishing & stomping feet

on fishbones cobbled steps-

you are red as wine

toasting the good harvest

with big bottles of cheers 


the plaza is buzzing

hands clapping fast, faster

we are swept along- 

tales of love & lament

we are sands in lost land




Pomogranate Tree, Spain

Posted for dVerse Poets Pub - Flamenca, Spanish verse form.   Join us when the pub doors open at 3pm EST.  Thanks for the visit and comments.   Form:  The elements of the Flamenca are:
  1. stanzaic, can be written in any number of quintains.
  2. syllabic, 6-6-5-6-6 syllables per line to imitate the rapid click of the heels of a dancer.
  3. L2 and L5 assonate. (same vowel sounds)


17 comments:

  1. This is such a beautiful poem. ❤️Makes me want to go to Spain!

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  2. This is exquisitely woven, Grace! I especially admire this part; "you are red as wine/toasting the good harvest/with big bottles of cheers." Thank you for the wonderful challenge! ❤️❤️❤️

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  3. I enjoyed your flamenca in the plaza, Grace, in which you’ve captured the essence of Spain. I especially like the sound of ‘clicking lights, red tight skirt’

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  4. I can hear the staccato dance rhythm in this poem, the phrasing chopped up to keep time with the feet.

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  5. Beautiful, Grace. I can hear the music and see the dancers. Love the last line - such a beauty!

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  6. Very visual. I enjoyed being swept away.

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  7. Thank you for your clicking
    in the bright white moonlight
    in the wine-red skirt -
    Called to full attention:
    why, I fight tight rhyme.. Night!

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  8. Beautiful imagery, Grace! I am swept away by the all flamenco-ish verbs. ❤️πŸ’ƒ

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  9. I especially enjoyed the last stanza. Thank you for a neat prompt.πŸ™πŸΌπŸ₯°

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  10. This is beautifully constructed and full of he rhythms of Spain πŸ™Œ

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  11. Love the gradual progression of movement and dance...and the description of "swishing & stomping feet on fishbones cobbled steps" .

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  12. Love the energy and motion that emblazons every line! What a wonderful form, Grace. Thank you for introducing us to it.

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  13. Swishing and stomping feet adds all the energy for the dance!

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  14. Beautiful poetry - the best time to meet for a dance midnight. It flows with the beat.

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  15. Gorgeous, and so in the spirit of the dance.

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  16. Your words dance through this poem so effortlessly

    MuchπŸ–€love

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  17. Your wonderful poem takes me into that festive Spanish Plaza amidst the excitement of it all πŸ‘ Bravo ❤️

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