Thursday, November 4, 2021

what the gods saw

 

he was sugar-coated

in gold

to behold him

a god

when the sun strikes his

muscled chest and legs


he posed

still as a sky cloud

caught between currents

as painters around him

buzz as bees circling, hungry for

honey


even though he is a skilled actor

poised as delicious cake puff

he could not veil


his eyes


she saw what no else saw

her fingers became his mirror

her brush became his 

raw 

poetry

in her canvas, he was a

bird in a cage

colorful feathers flickered out

& weighed 

down by black ink, her 

oils dripped


dripping

until it resembles

the swelling tear 

clouds


his eyes




Posted for dVerse Poets Pub - Meeting the Bar, hosted by Bjorn Rudberg.

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18 comments:

  1. Beautiful Grace.

    ‘her fingers became his mirror

    her brush became his

    raw

    poetry

    in her canvas, he was a

    bird in a cage

    It reminded me a little of Leonard Cohen, one of my favorite modern day poets. So a huge compliment to you ☺️💕

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  2. This is gorgeously composed, Grace! This bit stood out in particular for me; "even though he is a skilled actor poised as delicious cake puff he could not veil his eyes." Kudos! 💝💝

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  3. Beautiful! I love the way the final stanza and concluding line can be read in two different ways: that way, it becomes two different poems.

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  4. poignant and captivating ...
    "as painters around him

    buzz as bees circling, hungry for

    honey"
    sure many famous people suffer this ... not for me

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  5. Ooooh! I enjoyed that... wonderful description!

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  6. It really doesn't matter how the outside looks if what's inside is boiling... those eyes betray.

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  7. I hadn't read your work for some while until lately and I have to say I'm impressed with the strides you've made in the meantime. You've got it going on, woman.

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  8. Gorgeous writing, Grace: her painter's brush capturing what is revealed by his eyes on canvas. A romantic conceit which every artist (poet) yearns towards.
    pax,
    dora

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  9. a gorgeous poem. This painter and her subject/The subject and his painter. Love how that played out. Thanks for sharing.

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  10. Wow, way to go using metaphors that resonate beautifully. Going to call you amazing Grace ~~~

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  11. There's both appreciation, the joy of finding, and sadness here--the metaphor is nothing if not apt, for we are often remade (if we;re lucky) from the glitzy burden of having to be gods, into our truer forms by love. I especially liked "poised as delicious cake puff..." Lots of excellent phrases in this.

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  12. Beautifully rendered, Grace! The eyes usually give away.

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  13. Would fit into your other blog, too! Happy weekend, Grace

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