Thursday, May 24, 2012
The eye
white computer screen
trains eye to spot the box edges,
grey walls with polite glances and gestures
summer sun invites, glitters office window
a co-worker said she walked outside for a break
beautiful day to catch blue butterflies and goldfish
it could have been winter
mind on the cube full of files and sheets,
details today, breakfast meeting tomorrow
black cane in hand, he proudly smiles
as he wraps himself back to work like a busy bee,
regained health now precious as a white diamond
i search while driving the busy freeway, moody as a crab,
ignoring thirst for cold yogurt and freshly buttered croissants,
mind wanders on foot, overtaking huge trailer trucks
full of merchandise, sales goals, expectations, hellos
and goodbyes to busy people revolving the office doors,
while my eye follows a seagull soaring above the orange lit sky
gliding over the creek, a flash of silver plume in forest wild,
it is a beautiful day
Posted for D'verse Poets Pub: Stream of Consciousness Writing
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a beautiful day to start with your beautiful poem...Loved it...:)
ReplyDeleteI like this a lot, Grace. I feel as I was with you as you went through your day....and yes, indeed, it was a beautiful one.
ReplyDeleteIt was a great day here as well, although I can feel the things that aren't so swell. Stinkin traffic is all around and slow pokes like to be in the way all the time..haha
ReplyDeleteThis is wonderful stream of consciousness, Grace. A croissant and yogurt sound good right about now.
ReplyDeleteThis definately streamed with a kool expression of seemingly random consciousness that made sense in an abstract way. It reads beautifully. You possess such skill.
ReplyDeleteImpressive, sunny subconscious that maintain optimism amid the daily stresses. Your description of the guy with the black cane was very interesting and made me want to know more about him.
ReplyDeletemy eye watches that gull as well in its freedom in the midst of all the rest...you really give a sense of place in all your details...rich write grace...and enjoyed...smiles...
ReplyDeleteGrace, this is a great journey through the work day then all of a sudden the beauty of the last stanza in nature. If it were not for those moments I do believe we would all be completely crazy. And like Frank, I want to know more about the black cane guy!
ReplyDeletesuch a clever weaving of the abstract and concrete ... very cool - I found myself completely intrigued
ReplyDeletehttp://aleapingelephant.blogspot.ca/2012/05/drinking-from-mania-cup.html
Lovely weave in and out of real and daydreams. I want to be the seagull after a croissant and yogurt, please :)
ReplyDeleteEveryday is beautiful when you look at it as you have. Beautifully done.
ReplyDeleteDaydreaming along the highway can beget lots of inspiration! A workday of great expectations and everyday is a dream! Great write Grace!
ReplyDeleteHank
How wonderful to rise above the busy world. Your seagull reminded me of Joanathan Livingston Seagull.
ReplyDeleteThank God for a beautiful day! :)
ReplyDeleteIt is indeed a beautiful day. You have some delightful phrases here, including "moody as a crab"!
ReplyDeletei usually go for lunchbreak walks as well..just to smell the sun and a bit of forest air...love the part with the seagull.. a felt piece grace
ReplyDeleteBeautifully written! Love the way I was carried right along with your thoughts right to the seagull at the end.
ReplyDeleteNature offers the best breaks. My eye would have been on that soaring gull too. SoC works really nicely here.
ReplyDeleteThis is just beautiful, Grace. A really fine and accomplished poem that swept me away with it, each scene vividly seen. And this stanza is powerful beyond belief:
ReplyDeleteblack cane in hand, he proudly smiles
as he wraps himself back to work like a busy bee,
regained health now precious as a white diamond
A beautiful day indeed.
ReplyDelete'...busy people revolving the office doors' - wonderful descriptive words.
Anna :o]
My favourite line in this- 'it could have been winter'- this just contrasted with the beauty of the day outside whilst you were stuck in that office cube and looking at that computer screen....seems strange for me to pick this line amongst all the others- as you write beautifully here- but it just resonated- particularly as on this day it was the first sunny day in the UK for about 8 weeks!!! Great to see into your world- and to see your thoughts I tampered with as you let them flow
ReplyDeletebeautiful day to catch blue butterflies and goldfish
ReplyDelete- such a one - felt the total freshness - gorgeous - Lib